BobSafay-Galapagos Islands-Long Form

Chris Swanberg · December 1st, 2009, 09:45 PM

Bob...

I watched your entry last evening. I must say that inspite of the tight time constraints you had to shoot your film, you managed to make a nearly perfect film on the variety of life in the Galapagos, make it interesting. and keep the viewer's interest. Your titles were well done and the soundtrack was about as good as I can image anyone doing. The VO was very listenable, and the narration interesting. Professional !!!

My only minor critique/suggestion is that to me, your ending was a little abrupt. Might I suggest that maybe you do a 30second reprise of the trip at the end?

Having "been there - done that" I have found myself caught without footage to cut to, in, or otherwise use... the "reprise" might soften the ending a little. Just an idea.

Like I said almost a year ago - "Take us with you!" ...and you DID ! Thank you for a wonderful film !

Chris S.

ps. I cannot say enough about your sound levels, mix, etc...best soundtrack so far. Edits were very pleasing as well.

pps. Oh! The prop plane foley with a jet on the screen may need a little retooling, maybe? <g>.

Dale Guthormsen · December 9th, 2009, 08:35 AM

Bob,

I watched your full video this morning. You did a fine job cronicling your trip to the islands. I was very impressed with the fact that you use no music in the back ground and you still hold it together for the entire show. Twice I thought there was a little long bit of actual silence, but perhaps that is a good thing demonstrating the lack of noise we seem to almost expect. The voice over was smooth and totally uniform throughout, first class.

You did a good job showing the diversity of wildlife and I liked the fact that it was not catigorized or such, just as it unfolded or at least appeared that way, great Job.

I must agree that the end did seem a tad sudden/abrupt.
Your gentle slow pace to the entire half hour was awesome, a more gentle end would be fitting.

thanks for taking us along on the trip, I learned some new cool stuff.

December 9th, 2009, 08:35 AM	#62
Dale Guthormsen Inner Circle Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Saskatchewan Posts: 3,048	Bob, I watched your full video this morning. You did a fine job cronicling your trip to the islands. I was very impressed with the fact that you use no music in the back ground and you still hold it together for the entire show. Twice I thought there was a little long bit of actual silence, but perhaps that is a good thing demonstrating the lack of noise we seem to almost expect. The voice over was smooth and totally uniform throughout, first class. You did a good job showing the diversity of wildlife and I liked the fact that it was not catigorized or such, just as it unfolded or at least appeared that way, great Job. I must agree that the end did seem a tad sudden/abrupt. Your gentle slow pace to the entire half hour was awesome, a more gentle end would be fitting. thanks for taking us along on the trip, I learned some new cool stuff. __________________ DATS ALL FOLKS Dale W. Guthormsen

December 1st, 2009, 09:45 PM	#61
Chris Swanberg Major Player Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Sacramento, CA Posts: 904	Bob... I watched your entry last evening. I must say that inspite of the tight time constraints you had to shoot your film, you managed to make a nearly perfect film on the variety of life in the Galapagos, make it interesting. and keep the viewer's interest. Your titles were well done and the soundtrack was about as good as I can image anyone doing. The VO was very listenable, and the narration interesting. Professional !!! My only minor critique/suggestion is that to me, your ending was a little abrupt. Might I suggest that maybe you do a 30second reprise of the trip at the end? Having "been there - done that" I have found myself caught without footage to cut to, in, or otherwise use... the "reprise" might soften the ending a little. Just an idea. Like I said almost a year ago - "Take us with you!" ...and you DID ! Thank you for a wonderful film ! Chris S. ps. I cannot say enough about your sound levels, mix, etc...best soundtrack so far. Edits were very pleasing as well. pps. Oh! The prop plane foley with a jet on the screen may need a little retooling, maybe? <g>.