Show Your Work 2008

Dennis Murphy · September 17th, 2008, 02:08 PM

Yep, that about sums it up.
Nice work!

Jordi Dusanek · September 17th, 2008, 02:14 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Marcel D. Van Someren

I liked it...well paced (although I thought the first scene lasted a bit too long), well timed edits, nice shots. Told the story of making a nice breakfast, quickly. About the only thing I think would make it a bit better is work on the exposure. Some of the scenes were over exposed and that also contributes to focus issues. Aside from those two things, very well done!

Thank you for the comment. Some people had alredy told me that the first scene is too long, but I think it contributes to a better "shock" effect when the fast-paced editing comes in.

I fully agree with you in the overexposure issue. I'm not a professional, so it's hard for me to get the look I want, because every time I see some cool shot, behind there is days of searching over the internet and reading books about how to achieve that particular look. And when it comes to making it for real, you find problems that you never imagined before...

I'll be working hard in the next project, so it looks better!

Thank you again!

Ivo van Aart · September 19th, 2008, 04:40 AM

Thanks!

Anyone else? :-)

Eugene Presley · September 19th, 2008, 06:15 AM

Without any doubt one of the most beautiful shorts ever. This really is stunning. Simplicity above all. Less is more. This 2 minutes are a classic. I do not exagerate.

Superb acting of the guy, I love how the camera keeps rolling after he gets the heart back.

Terrific use of audio. Let this short be an example. You don't need dolly's, cranes and huge crews to make something that is universal, something that we all recognize and touches us.
I would have casted another type of girl, but that's personal, nothing against her.

Ivo, you should start realising that this 2 minutes are splendid. Many congratulations!

J.J. Kim · September 19th, 2008, 10:43 AM

I liked the acting of the guy, too.
I loved colors and everything else!
Good work!

JJ

J.J. Kim · September 19th, 2008, 11:02 AM

Thank you for sharing your reel!
I liked most of it, but I have to agree more with Lori. I myself am making reel for my company right now, and the first thing even before I gather the footage was what to put in the beginning, middle and end. sorta arranging and planning things out.
I have NO DOUBT that you are very artistic, and got some top notch tech skill. But just like Lori said, storytelling was somewhat not focused and footages were scattered.
I wrote down some of the shots in the middle: LeBron James-Guy on the sofa-Band music video-Rapper-Guitar-shoes-Guy wondering-LeBron James-Band-Guy wondering-Water Fountain at Park-Band-Rapper-Guy wondering-Rapper-Rescue Team-James LeBron- and I think you get my point.
I would definitely arrange some of it, put similar stuff closer together instead of here and there.
Here is my 2cents...
Keep up the great work, man!

JJ

Jason Robinson · September 19th, 2008, 05:47 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ivo van Aart

Hello!

Just filmed my first project for filmschool. It's about...well, see it for yourself. It cost me about 5 hours to make, but everything was storyboarded and well prepared.
Shot on Canon Xh A1 with SGpro
Cut with FCP on an iMac in HDV (yes, iMacs does the job perfectly)

Have fun! Any criticism is more than welcome!
Zielsveel on Vimeo

Very good use of facial expressions and actions to indicate what was un-spoken. For her actions, it seems like her face and body language could have given more to the scene (not like I know what I'm talking about... just what I'm seeing).

Very impressive story.

Eric Knopp · September 19th, 2008, 08:07 PM

I have undertaken a recent project: Document a local string quartet as they prepare for their next concert series. I have learned that documentary is a totally different style. I am interested in all of your comments. Help out the new guy!

First interview on Vimeo

P.S. Something was messed up in the encode and/or upload, so the audio is wack.

Dennis Murphy · September 20th, 2008, 03:54 PM

A few suggestions:
Choose a better location with less noise - that audio was not the best.
Don't shoot someone with a window behind them with bright daylight outside.
You have some interlacing issues going on there.

Eric Knopp · September 21st, 2008, 12:52 AM

Thank you, Dennis. Duly noted on all points. Unfortunately, I don't have the best gear around, which, I think, had more to do with the audio problems. Not enough isolation.

But the background, yes, I will agree, that was terrible planning. I may have to re-shoot with all of the sunlight off the windshields.

This is how we learn though, thanks again!

Eric

Michael Kraus · September 21st, 2008, 01:08 AM

There are definitely some problems with the interlacing. I have had issues with the same thing on a few of my recent projects. Does anyone know how to fix/prevent this?

Ivo van Aart · September 21st, 2008, 03:54 AM

thank you very much :)

Josh Chesarek · September 21st, 2008, 06:33 AM

Make sure to select the deinterlace option from your video editor when exporting the video for use on computers and the web. This should remove the lines you are seeing in the video.

Eric Knopp · September 21st, 2008, 08:58 AM

Thank you, Josh. I love these boards. Everyone here is awesome.

Desi Hernandez Jr. · September 21st, 2008, 10:05 AM

I enjoyed this short. The score perfectly pushes the story along, without over-doing it. Whar filters did you use for the color? Very impressive work.

September 17th, 2008, 02:08 PM	#961
Dennis Murphy Major Player Join Date: May 2006 Location: Whangarei, New Zealand Posts: 396	Yep, that about sums it up. Nice work! __________________ http://www.dmvideostuff.co.nz

September 19th, 2008, 08:07 PM	#968
Eric Knopp New Boot Join Date: May 2007 Location: Portland Oregon Posts: 22	First Interview I have undertaken a recent project: Document a local string quartet as they prepare for their next concert series. I have learned that documentary is a totally different style. I am interested in all of your comments. Help out the new guy! First interview on Vimeo P.S. Something was messed up in the encode and/or upload, so the audio is wack.

September 20th, 2008, 03:54 PM	#969
Dennis Murphy Major Player Join Date: May 2006 Location: Whangarei, New Zealand Posts: 396	A few suggestions: Choose a better location with less noise - that audio was not the best. Don't shoot someone with a window behind them with bright daylight outside. You have some interlacing issues going on there. __________________ http://www.dmvideostuff.co.nz

September 21st, 2008, 06:33 AM	#973
Josh Chesarek Major Player Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Winter Park, FL Posts: 978	Make sure to select the deinterlace option from your video editor when exporting the video for use on computers and the web. This should remove the lines you are seeing in the video. __________________ Simple Thought Productions - Life @ 30,000 Words per second

September 19th, 2008, 04:40 AM	#963
Ivo van Aart Regular Crew Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Breda, Netherlands Posts: 67	Thanks! Anyone else? :-)

September 19th, 2008, 06:15 AM	#964
Eugene Presley Major Player Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Antwerpen (Belgium) Posts: 220	Without any doubt one of the most beautiful shorts ever. This really is stunning. Simplicity above all. Less is more. This 2 minutes are a classic. I do not exagerate. Superb acting of the guy, I love how the camera keeps rolling after he gets the heart back. Terrific use of audio. Let this short be an example. You don't need dolly's, cranes and huge crews to make something that is universal, something that we all recognize and touches us. I would have casted another type of girl, but that's personal, nothing against her. Ivo, you should start realising that this 2 minutes are splendid. Many congratulations!

September 19th, 2008, 10:43 AM	#965
J.J. Kim Major Player Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Wheeling, IL Posts: 270	I liked the acting of the guy, too. I loved colors and everything else! Good work! JJ

September 19th, 2008, 11:02 AM	#966
J.J. Kim Major Player Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: Wheeling, IL Posts: 270	Thank you for sharing your reel! I liked most of it, but I have to agree more with Lori. I myself am making reel for my company right now, and the first thing even before I gather the footage was what to put in the beginning, middle and end. sorta arranging and planning things out. I have NO DOUBT that you are very artistic, and got some top notch tech skill. But just like Lori said, storytelling was somewhat not focused and footages were scattered. I wrote down some of the shots in the middle: LeBron James-Guy on the sofa-Band music video-Rapper-Guitar-shoes-Guy wondering-LeBron James-Band-Guy wondering-Water Fountain at Park-Band-Rapper-Guy wondering-Rapper-Rescue Team-James LeBron- and I think you get my point. I would definitely arrange some of it, put similar stuff closer together instead of here and there. Here is my 2cents... Keep up the great work, man! JJ

September 21st, 2008, 12:52 AM	#970
Eric Knopp New Boot Join Date: May 2007 Location: Portland Oregon Posts: 22	Thank you, Dennis. Duly noted on all points. Unfortunately, I don't have the best gear around, which, I think, had more to do with the audio problems. Not enough isolation. But the background, yes, I will agree, that was terrible planning. I may have to re-shoot with all of the sunlight off the windshields. This is how we learn though, thanks again! Eric

September 21st, 2008, 01:08 AM	#971
Michael Kraus Major Player Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Denton, TX Posts: 232	There are definitely some problems with the interlacing. I have had issues with the same thing on a few of my recent projects. Does anyone know how to fix/prevent this?

September 21st, 2008, 03:54 AM	#972
Ivo van Aart Regular Crew Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Breda, Netherlands Posts: 67	thank you very much :)

September 21st, 2008, 08:58 AM	#974
Eric Knopp New Boot Join Date: May 2007 Location: Portland Oregon Posts: 22	Thank you, Josh. I love these boards. Everyone here is awesome.

September 21st, 2008, 10:05 AM	#975
Desi Hernandez Jr. New Boot Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: Tallahassee, Florida Posts: 8	I enjoyed this short. The score perfectly pushes the story along, without over-doing it. Whar filters did you use for the color? Very impressive work.