Show Your Work 2008

Daniel Vanniekerk · January 22nd, 2008, 01:01 AM

Dave, you got robbed!. IMO, your video is pretty damn good. Concept very good from a marketing point of view, and execution without much to criticize. Far superior to the 'winning' video.

Riley Harmon · January 22nd, 2008, 01:41 AM

A few things working on aside from commercial work.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nqvztI2MrE0

http://rileyharmon.com/news4.html ( X_X )

Bradley D Barber · January 22nd, 2008, 12:12 PM

My original post said Wedding Trailer. This turned out to be a documentary and less wedding footage. Please feedback your thoughts.

Thanks again

Michael Pulcinella · January 22nd, 2008, 01:51 PM

I find the Youtube clip to be WAY too talky! I jumped out of it after about a minute or so but then went back to give it a second chance. It's interesting but it takes too long to see what you are talking about and then you are silent while we watch the demonstration of the game. I would suggest that you begin to show the game while you are still explaining it. Overlap the two. One of the great things about editing is that you can condense things.

As for the receipt section...same criticism. Your explanation is fine but you should show a close up pan of the receipts as you talk about them. You are standing in the dark, give me something to watch while I listen to you, it is VIDEO after all!

Good luck with your project!

Riley Harmon · January 22nd, 2008, 02:04 PM

they arent my videos, i just did my work and some art video website sonarta.com made interviews at the show. i was just there to show stuff

Michael Pulcinella · January 22nd, 2008, 02:07 PM

I see. You obviously put a lot of thought into your art, you need to find a videographer/editor that puts as much thought into theirs. You are not being presented as well as you could be, is all I'm saying.

Also, if you put a video on a video forum you should expect that the video technique will get critiqued, not just the content.

John Miller · January 22nd, 2008, 10:25 PM

My first real test of my new (and first) HDV camcorder. Shot on Saturday afternoon through the back door (through the glass!).

http://www.4shared.com/file/35644476...ified=6feae3b4

(48MB; 20 seconds; m2t)

David Chia · January 24th, 2008, 08:26 AM

shorter version of an original version that I made .

It is a bit easier for the eyes and smoother than the longer version,

http://blip.tv/file/472200?filename=...Version630.mov

Pierre Louis Beranek · January 24th, 2008, 11:02 AM

Just how far would you go to save a couple bucks?!

This video was selected as one of the 10 finalists in a Nationwide (Canada) Video Contest by ING Direct.

To see the video, click on this link: http://www.ingdirect.ca/superstarsaver/watch.html.

Once there, click on the grey ‘Vote’ tab:

1 – click on “Next Video >>” until you come across the video called “Sauvez A Bout de Souffle!” (Save Til You’re Out of Breath! Don't worry, the video has subtitles!)

2 - or type “Sauvez” in the “Search for a video:” box at the bottom, and then click on the small icon that appears underneath.

If you like my video, please vote for it!
To vote, simply click on the ‘thumbs up’ icon. To see a larger version of the video, click on the "Post a Response" button, which takes you to the video on YouTube. There you can leave comments and give the video a star rating (although voting can only be done with the thumbs up icon). I’d love to know what you think!

Voting goes on until January 30th. Everyone can vote for my video once a day, so please visit the site and vote as many days as you can!

Thanks for your comments and thanks for your votes!

Cheers,

Pierre Louis Beranek

Nathan Quattrini · January 24th, 2008, 11:35 AM

So i met a guy from boston last week that has a small stunt team. My friend David and I hung out for a few hours with him and decided to choreograph and film something on the spot. Here it is

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s3bqy3fKzO4

Michael Wisniewski · January 24th, 2008, 06:02 PM

That was great Nathan. Looks like a lot of fun. Did they have that choreographed or was it improvised on the spot.

Ryan Mueller · January 24th, 2008, 08:37 PM

Hey everybody,

I need some feedback on this 30 second commercial. It will be going up on various networks, so any constructive criticism would be much appreciated!

http://www.rpmproductions.info/videos/samples/p17.mov

Thanks,
Ryan

Mike Watson · January 24th, 2008, 09:05 PM

I like it. Beautiful images, and well shot. Incredible color, and good lighting.

Suggestions:

I'd like to see shots of her doing the chef-thing in the beginning, where she says she's a chef.

I'd like to see shots of a great bar and great live music when she mentions those things.

The end, where she transitions from "this is an interview" mode to saying "Parallel 17, a vietnameese restaurant located at..." is weird. Get a VO guy for that part, or just do it via text. As it stands, it breaks the flow of the spot, and it has good flow up to that point.

Also, I'd like to see a couple more shots of the food, because it looked REALLY good.

Better than about 90% of the local restaurant spots around here. Good job.

Charlie Gillespie · January 24th, 2008, 09:23 PM

Why the push in/pull out shot of the photo of the guy on the motorcycle?
Looks clean other than that...

Ryan Mueller · January 24th, 2008, 10:02 PM

Thanks Mike for the feedback. The "chef-thing" idea I like, and I do have some footage of her in the kitchen. I haven't been able to get any material on the live music, but the shots when she's talking about the bar are of the bar. Maybe I should throw in a wider shot of the bar at that point? She is currently trying to get me some pics of her dishes and I may have to go back in and shoot some band footage. The break in the flow at the end was somewhat intentional to pull the viewers attention back into what the meaning of it all is. So many commercials go unnoticed because they don't make a statement, but maybe I should think about re-working it a little bit. Thank you again for all of your suggestions, they are great!

Charlie, the push in/pull out shot was put in cause I thought it was a nice touch. Now that I look at it some more, maybe I should stick with the slow pan across the pic that I had in there before. I'll mull it over.

This is exactly why critique is so vital, you begin to see things that you have lost in the countless hours of looking at the same footage over and over again. It's great to have a second, third, tenth set of eyes.

Thanks again,
Ryan

January 22nd, 2008, 01:01 AM	#61
Daniel Vanniekerk New Boot Join Date: May 2007 Location: Johannesburg, South Africa Posts: 20	Contest Dave, you got robbed!. IMO, your video is pretty damn good. Concept very good from a marketing point of view, and execution without much to criticize. Far superior to the 'winning' video.

January 22nd, 2008, 01:41 AM	#62
Riley Harmon Major Player Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Oklahoma Posts: 424	Some stuff A few things working on aside from commercial work. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nqvztI2MrE0 http://rileyharmon.com/news4.html ( X_X )

January 22nd, 2008, 12:12 PM	#63
Bradley D Barber Regular Crew Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Washington Posts: 117	Short Documentary Trailer My original post said Wedding Trailer. This turned out to be a documentary and less wedding footage. Please feedback your thoughts. Thanks again __________________ Old South Marketing and Public Relations www.oldsouthmediagroup.com

January 22nd, 2008, 02:07 PM	#66
Michael Pulcinella Major Player Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Ridley Park, PA, USA Posts: 269	I see. You obviously put a lot of thought into your art, you need to find a videographer/editor that puts as much thought into theirs. You are not being presented as well as you could be, is all I'm saying. Also, if you put a video on a video forum you should expect that the video technique will get critiqued, not just the content. Last edited by Michael Pulcinella; January 23rd, 2008 at 08:03 AM.

January 22nd, 2008, 10:25 PM	#67
John Miller Major Player Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Hillsborough, NC, USA Posts: 968	Snowy Bird Feeder My first real test of my new (and first) HDV camcorder. Shot on Saturday afternoon through the back door (through the glass!). http://www.4shared.com/file/35644476...ified=6feae3b4 (48MB; 20 seconds; m2t)

January 22nd, 2008, 01:51 PM	#64
Michael Pulcinella Major Player Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Ridley Park, PA, USA Posts: 269	I find the Youtube clip to be WAY too talky! I jumped out of it after about a minute or so but then went back to give it a second chance. It's interesting but it takes too long to see what you are talking about and then you are silent while we watch the demonstration of the game. I would suggest that you begin to show the game while you are still explaining it. Overlap the two. One of the great things about editing is that you can condense things. As for the receipt section...same criticism. Your explanation is fine but you should show a close up pan of the receipts as you talk about them. You are standing in the dark, give me something to watch while I listen to you, it is VIDEO after all! Good luck with your project!

January 22nd, 2008, 02:04 PM	#65
Riley Harmon Major Player Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Oklahoma Posts: 424	they arent my videos, i just did my work and some art video website sonarta.com made interviews at the show. i was just there to show stuff

January 24th, 2008, 08:26 AM	#68
David Chia Major Player Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Singapore Posts: 427	Car show Frankfurt2007 shorter version of an original version that I made . It is a bit easier for the eyes and smoother than the longer version, http://blip.tv/file/472200?filename=...Version630.mov __________________ Website: http://www.Motiononcanvas.com Camera Operator/ Video Editor in Singapore. https://new.cinematographer.org.au/m...713/david-chia

January 24th, 2008, 11:02 AM	#69
Pierre Louis Beranek New Boot Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Toronto, Canada Posts: 9	Funny Video for your Enjoyment! (Contest Finalist!) Just how far would you go to save a couple bucks?! This video was selected as one of the 10 finalists in a Nationwide (Canada) Video Contest by ING Direct. To see the video, click on this link: http://www.ingdirect.ca/superstarsaver/watch.html. Once there, click on the grey ‘Vote’ tab: 1 – click on “Next Video >>” until you come across the video called “Sauvez A Bout de Souffle!” (Save Til You’re Out of Breath! Don't worry, the video has subtitles!) 2 - or type “Sauvez” in the “Search for a video:” box at the bottom, and then click on the small icon that appears underneath. If you like my video, please vote for it! To vote, simply click on the ‘thumbs up’ icon. To see a larger version of the video, click on the "Post a Response" button, which takes you to the video on YouTube. There you can leave comments and give the video a star rating (although voting can only be done with the thumbs up icon). I’d love to know what you think! Voting goes on until January 30th. Everyone can vote for my video once a day, so please visit the site and vote as many days as you can! Thanks for your comments and thanks for your votes! Cheers, Pierre Louis Beranek Last edited by Pierre Louis Beranek; January 24th, 2008 at 11:19 PM.

January 24th, 2008, 11:35 AM	#70
Nathan Quattrini Major Player Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Warwick, Rhode Island Posts: 740	Quick Hong Kong style fight So i met a guy from boston last week that has a small stunt team. My friend David and I hung out for a few hours with him and decided to choreograph and film something on the spot. Here it is http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s3bqy3fKzO4 __________________ Cinematography Site

January 24th, 2008, 06:02 PM	#71
Michael Wisniewski Wrangler Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: Makati, Metro Manila Posts: 2,706 Images: 32	That was great Nathan. Looks like a lot of fun. Did they have that choreographed or was it improvised on the spot. __________________ "Ultimately, the most extraordinary thing, in a frame, is a human being." - Martin Scorsese

January 24th, 2008, 08:37 PM	#72
Ryan Mueller Major Player Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Highlands Ranch, CO Posts: 336	Need critique on commercial. Hey everybody, I need some feedback on this 30 second commercial. It will be going up on various networks, so any constructive criticism would be much appreciated! http://www.rpmproductions.info/videos/samples/p17.mov Thanks, Ryan

January 24th, 2008, 09:05 PM	#73
Mike Watson Trustee Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: San Diego, CA Posts: 1,082	I like it. Beautiful images, and well shot. Incredible color, and good lighting. Suggestions: I'd like to see shots of her doing the chef-thing in the beginning, where she says she's a chef. I'd like to see shots of a great bar and great live music when she mentions those things. The end, where she transitions from "this is an interview" mode to saying "Parallel 17, a vietnameese restaurant located at..." is weird. Get a VO guy for that part, or just do it via text. As it stands, it breaks the flow of the spot, and it has good flow up to that point. Also, I'd like to see a couple more shots of the food, because it looked REALLY good. Better than about 90% of the local restaurant spots around here. Good job.

January 24th, 2008, 09:23 PM	#74
Charlie Gillespie Regular Crew Join Date: Sep 2005 Posts: 35	Why the push in/pull out shot of the photo of the guy on the motorcycle? Looks clean other than that...

January 24th, 2008, 10:02 PM	#75
Ryan Mueller Major Player Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Highlands Ranch, CO Posts: 336	Thanks Mike for the feedback. The "chef-thing" idea I like, and I do have some footage of her in the kitchen. I haven't been able to get any material on the live music, but the shots when she's talking about the bar are of the bar. Maybe I should throw in a wider shot of the bar at that point? She is currently trying to get me some pics of her dishes and I may have to go back in and shoot some band footage. The break in the flow at the end was somewhat intentional to pull the viewers attention back into what the meaning of it all is. So many commercials go unnoticed because they don't make a statement, but maybe I should think about re-working it a little bit. Thank you again for all of your suggestions, they are great! Charlie, the push in/pull out shot was put in cause I thought it was a nice touch. Now that I look at it some more, maybe I should stick with the slow pan across the pic that I had in there before. I'll mull it over. This is exactly why critique is so vital, you begin to see things that you have lost in the countless hours of looking at the same footage over and over again. It's great to have a second, third, tenth set of eyes. Thanks again, Ryan