November 13th, 2006, 02:46 PM | #1 |
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I was a little hesitant about posting this, since I wasn't sure if it was up to par with all the other work that has been shown here. But I am looking for criticism, so here goes.
During the summer I was inspired to try my hand at greenscreening. I had always wanted to try; however, I never got around to it. I love film noirs, and I loved the visual style of Sin City, so I decided I would try something along those lines. Plus, it would be a good excuse to use a greenscreen. I quickly whipped up a short script, made a greenscreen on my back porch, and used my brother and his girlfriend for actors. This was more of an experiment for me, as I've never greenscreened, or used 3d software before (and it certainly shows). I sent this in to the Cinefest CTV Amateur videomakers competition, and ended up winning first 1st place in the student category (much to my surprise). Anyways, if you go to http://robarmieri.8ap.com/ and click portfolio then videography, you'll see the link to my short "Devils and Angels". |
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November 13th, 2006, 08:58 PM | #3 |
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Looks good.
My only two comments are: narration and performances. Since I assume you are doing the voice over, please don't take offense, but the narration didn't work for me. I would hire a professional narrator with a good "radio voice" since you really never see the main character speak. It just sounded boyish, weak and unconvincing for a detective. It should be more of a controlled, confident and powerful voice. Also the sound could have been recorded. The acting probably could have been up'ed a notch, but that isn't something you can fix so that's about it. Otherwise you did a good job. Congratulations.
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As for the acting, I thought they did a pretty good job since they don't act, and I literally just pulled them aside for an afternoon. I also agree with you about the sound. It is something that I always tend to neglect for one reason or another(even though I know sound is extremely important). However, it is something I'll be trying to work on in my future projects. Thanks again for the criticism. |
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i didn't mind the VO, it was very josh hartnettish
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In the future hire actors, and not just any actor, but a good one. MOST films fail at performances, and its what most people lack when they make a film. I think there is a tendency to have a good idea, without a good script executing the idea, and then think because there's a good idea that anyone can just say the lines and it will be good. This could not be further from the truth. What set most films apart from good solid movies are the performances, and the one that have bad performances usually are referred to as b-movies (usually horror flicks) and student films. AVOID either. =) Get actors, rehearse, and the rehearse some more, as you will discover new things about the story and characters you didn't know before. Its a learning process. Scrips are like written music and the actors are the players. If they play bad notes your movie will suffer. You already have potential as a filmmaker, so don't cut corners, espcially important ones.
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In any event, all people are potentially good actors, with some help and guidance. Don't let small towns discourage you. If you can work with them and you have agood sense of getting out natural performances you should be okay regardless of where you live. Good luck, can't wait to see your other projects.
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I thought that was pretty damn cool.
I know you've got the noir thing going on, but I found it just a little too dark, or maybe it was because it was displayed within a white web page that did that? Did you do the dice and ice pick yourself? |
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Hey Rob,
I liked Devils and Angels for an experimental project. It really makes you stop and think as to what other kinds of film projects can be made using green screen. I'm not sure if you've ever seen the movie "Black Cadillac" (2003) but 85% of this film takes place in a car where three young guys begin to get mysteriously followed. All the internal car scenes were shot in a studio using either greenscreen or digitally projected backgrounds. The movie itself was shot on film, but the effect turned out real well. Since I was on your site I also watched your opening scene for "In The Dark". Were the shots going from right to left dolly shots combined with horizontal slide wipes? What kind of dolly did you use? Thanks, Dennis |
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I've never heard of "Black Cadillac" but I'll certainly try and check it out. For the "In the Dark" intro, I was dollying from left to right and did a whip pan to the right at the beginning and end of each shot. The dolly is just some terrible piece of junk I made over the summer with rollerblade wheels. |
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I liked the sinister look, feel and sound, and the choice of music was excellent. There have been some comments on the voice, and I think it's real and suitable, but a little thin-sounding. Perhaps you could bump up some digital EQ to compensate for the microphone.
On another note, call me naive, but I always thought smoking pieces were paid sponsor shots, a time-honored tradition in Hollywood. Why would someone willingly make a scene with tobacco smoking? I'd go for a bong or opium, or something else more illegal. |
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