New Short Film I Made! Please Watch! at DVinfo.net

Michael Rapadas · October 4th, 2006, 12:39 AM

a video my friends acted in when i did the 'director/editor' thing. We had a contest and it was a rush-job. start to finish in 3 days. tell me what you think!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wGRfKSf5fAI

very controversial

Chris Barcellos · October 4th, 2006, 01:02 AM

Nice shooting and nice graphics. I think the distraction for me was the female voice narating what was obviously being told by a male. Created a disconnect for me....

Gabriel Yeager · October 4th, 2006, 09:48 AM

Very good! I like it. But like Chris said, the female voice was confusing.

~Gabriel~

Tony Davies-Patrick · October 4th, 2006, 10:16 AM

I agree...it definitely needed a male voice narrative.

Van Zijl Loots · October 5th, 2006, 06:19 AM

Even though the voice is kinda out of place in the beginning, but it really makes the final plot point worthwhile at the end...

Regards
Van Zijl

Paul M. Diaz · October 5th, 2006, 08:44 PM

It's good, i hate to be part of the majority, but I too felt the voice was off, to me it sold from the begining that he was not around to tell his story.. While I understood the end, I think it felt a bit rushed and could have had a bigger punch.. very good work though...

Kevin Calumpit · October 5th, 2006, 11:03 PM

If you have time to change it have the guys voice at the beginning then transition to the girls voice when shes talking.....should give for a better effect i think.....plus if you have time to make that change it shouldnt be too hard becuase its just a voice over.

Frank Hool · October 5th, 2006, 11:20 PM

Female voice worked for me. Just kept up feeling that theres coming turn before the end. I liked that and overall everthing else as well.

Matt Hiebert · October 6th, 2006, 06:06 AM

Your camera work and editing I thought were fantastic. Great subject matter and well handled. I did have trouble with the female narrator though. Her voice and reading were well done, but superimposed over a male main character made me "notice" the narration too much. There would have to be a reason for such a choice. Like, I kept expecting her to be reading his diary over his grave in the end or something.

All in all, great.

matt

Michael Rapadas · October 6th, 2006, 09:21 AM

Thanks everyone! You guys are really helping me out because I'm the scriptwriter/storyboard as well as director. I wanted the audience to wonder and question why the voice was a girl's. But I guess it creates a complex element. I have to work on organizing scenes and creating an understanding plot. Thanks again everybody!

Dana Acciavatti · October 8th, 2006, 05:27 PM

I thought there was some good editing in there. It looks like you edit on a Mac using FCP Studio. I do as well. I must admit, like everyone else, the female voice had me confused as well.
What was the inspiration for this short, may I ask?

Adam Bray · October 8th, 2006, 08:44 PM

Why the heck is there a female narrating a male POV? I did not bother watching much past the credits. I found that too annoying.

Michael Rapadas · October 8th, 2006, 08:56 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adam Bray

Why the heck is there a female narrating a male POV? I did not bother watching much past the credits. I found that too annoying.

.... ouch .....

Adam Bray · October 8th, 2006, 09:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Michael Rapadas

.... ouch .....

Was not trying to be rude. But it created a total disconnect.

Michael Rapadas · October 8th, 2006, 09:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adam Bray

Was not trying to be rude. But it created a total disconnect.

It's nothing :D . We're still all fellow filmmakers and dv enthusiasts here!

Thanks for watching though.

October 4th, 2006, 12:39 AM	#1
Michael Rapadas Regular Crew Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: South San Francisco, CA Posts: 91	New Short Film I Made! Please Watch! a video my friends acted in when i did the 'director/editor' thing. We had a contest and it was a rush-job. start to finish in 3 days. tell me what you think! http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wGRfKSf5fAI very controversial

October 4th, 2006, 01:02 AM	#2
Chris Barcellos Inner Circle Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Elk Grove CA Posts: 6,838	Nice shooting and nice graphics. I think the distraction for me was the female voice narating what was obviously being told by a male. Created a disconnect for me.... __________________ Chris J. Barcellos

October 4th, 2006, 09:48 AM	#3
Gabriel Yeager Major Player Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Washington, NorthWest USA Posts: 788	Very good! I like it. But like Chris said, the female voice was confusing. ~Gabriel~ __________________ Gabriel Photography

October 4th, 2006, 10:16 AM	#4
Tony Davies-Patrick Trustee Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Worldwide Posts: 1,589	I agree...it definitely needed a male voice narrative. __________________ www.WILDCARP.com www.NIKON.me.uk

October 5th, 2006, 06:19 AM	#5
Van Zijl Loots Regular Crew Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Cape Town, South Africa Posts: 31	New Short Film I Made! Please Watch! Even though the voice is kinda out of place in the beginning, but it really makes the final plot point worthwhile at the end... Regards Van Zijl

October 5th, 2006, 08:44 PM	#6
Paul M. Diaz New Boot Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Hollywood, FL Posts: 18	It's good, i hate to be part of the majority, but I too felt the voice was off, to me it sold from the begining that he was not around to tell his story.. While I understood the end, I think it felt a bit rushed and could have had a bigger punch.. very good work though...

October 5th, 2006, 11:03 PM	#7
Kevin Calumpit Regular Crew Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: San Marcos, CALIFORNIA Posts: 103	If you have time to change it have the guys voice at the beginning then transition to the girls voice when shes talking.....should give for a better effect i think.....plus if you have time to make that change it shouldnt be too hard becuase its just a voice over.

October 5th, 2006, 11:20 PM	#8
Frank Hool Major Player Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Barca Spain Posts: 384	Female voice worked for me. Just kept up feeling that theres coming turn before the end. I liked that and overall everthing else as well.

October 6th, 2006, 06:06 AM	#9
Matt Hiebert New Boot Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Jefferson City, Missouri Posts: 9	Very great Your camera work and editing I thought were fantastic. Great subject matter and well handled. I did have trouble with the female narrator though. Her voice and reading were well done, but superimposed over a male main character made me "notice" the narration too much. There would have to be a reason for such a choice. Like, I kept expecting her to be reading his diary over his grave in the end or something. All in all, great. matt

October 6th, 2006, 09:21 AM	#10
Michael Rapadas Regular Crew Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: South San Francisco, CA Posts: 91	thanks for all the comments! Thanks everyone! You guys are really helping me out because I'm the scriptwriter/storyboard as well as director. I wanted the audience to wonder and question why the voice was a girl's. But I guess it creates a complex element. I have to work on organizing scenes and creating an understanding plot. Thanks again everybody!

October 8th, 2006, 05:27 PM	#11
Dana Acciavatti Regular Crew Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Beverly, MA. Posts: 49	I thought there was some good editing in there. It looks like you edit on a Mac using FCP Studio. I do as well. I must admit, like everyone else, the female voice had me confused as well. What was the inspiration for this short, may I ask?

October 8th, 2006, 08:44 PM	#12
Adam Bray Major Player Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Houston/Austin Posts: 394	Why the heck is there a female narrating a male POV? I did not bother watching much past the credits. I found that too annoying.