New video, please critique

Kevin Burnfield · January 26th, 2004, 03:30 PM

I liked it a lot.

I think the others here made good suggestions especially about the fast disolve transitions. You can use a really short disolve and it's barely noticable but it's a 'softer' cut.

The one that I might make is to expand on the church thing or on her.

There's only one or two shots where she isn't singing. Perhaps cast her as a character in the song.

I need to go back and listen to the words to the song but I imagine there was a reason for it and perhaps you can chose a lower pace interlude in the song and have a lingering exterior CU shot of her in a window looking out.

Perhaps at a moment of a good line in the song she can have some emotional reaction and place her hand against the glass....

Christopher C. Murphy · January 26th, 2004, 04:10 PM

Hey, great work! How did you get the warmth?

Also, the only thing I would do is cut less - dissolve more. However, I think that dissolving on certain spots would make more sense...like going from wide to closeups.

Overall 8 out of 9 stars! If you tweak it...I'll give you 9! If you get it on one of those country music channels...10!

Murph

January 26th, 2004, 04:10 PM	#17
Christopher C. Murphy Trustee Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Boston, MA Posts: 1,707	Hey, great work! How did you get the warmth? Also, the only thing I would do is cut less - dissolve more. However, I think that dissolving on certain spots would make more sense...like going from wide to closeups. Overall 8 out of 9 stars! If you tweak it...I'll give you 9! If you get it on one of those country music channels...10! Murph __________________ Christopher C. Murphy Director, Producer, Writer

January 26th, 2004, 03:30 PM	#16
Kevin Burnfield Major Player Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Princeton, NJ Posts: 363	I liked it a lot. I think the others here made good suggestions especially about the fast disolve transitions. You can use a really short disolve and it's barely noticable but it's a 'softer' cut. The one that I might make is to expand on the church thing or on her. There's only one or two shots where she isn't singing. Perhaps cast her as a character in the song. I need to go back and listen to the words to the song but I imagine there was a reason for it and perhaps you can chose a lower pace interlude in the song and have a lingering exterior CU shot of her in a window looking out. Perhaps at a moment of a good line in the song she can have some emotional reaction and place her hand against the glass....