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Bill Thesken · January 14th, 2014, 07:26 PM

I tried something different style wise. For these DVinfo challenges I've made films about natural science, underwater biology, a couple of spoofs, a few comedies, a spiritual film or two, surfing. For some reason I suddenly wanted to make something quick and gritty and dark, something that scared the hell out of me.
Technical:
GH2, stock lens.
Zoom H4N.
Sennheiser lav mic.
Filmed in full color HD, edited with film effects in Vegas Pro 9.

In a grim future world.
When the State Controls All.

"Citizen"

http://vimeopro.com/user517265/citizen

Tim Lewis · January 14th, 2014, 07:42 PM

Bill

It was an interesting piece with good use of sound and video effects to convey the mood. I did find that the lush green growth the farmer produced to be a little to fresh and good for a dystopian world. Maybe that is from a time long past?

Cheers

Tim

Trond Saetre · January 15th, 2014, 04:37 AM

Hi Bill,
Another interesting film from you. I enjoyed watching.

A detail: I didn't really catch the meaning of the sound effect from 1:01 - 1:10. Sounded kinda like a jet flying by and also a little distorted.

Thank you for sharing.

Lorinda Norton · January 17th, 2014, 12:26 AM

Bill, you sure succeeded in doing something completely out of the ordinary! Thank you for leaving most to the imagination; I'm not in the mood for too much realism. Gritty is a good word for describing this piece, so if you wanted to be consistent, Tim's thoughts about the lush colors of the produce, past or present, are certainly worth pondering.

As always, I appreciate the thoughtfulness you put into your work. Thanks for yet another interesting entry!

Bill Thesken · January 17th, 2014, 01:14 AM

Thanks for the comments, and for watching.

I made this piece with 3 perspectives, Outside / Inside-Outside / Inside.
3 distinct film looks, black and white, old 80's film, and HD.
ie: The interrogator's view/ the prisoner explaining himself to his detainees/ and then as he's being physically destroyed for not giving the right answer, his 'inner' vision of his little farm which is prohibited along with anything else not approved by the State, grasping for the clear color vision as it turns to black and white with his destruction.
"State your name" Your name 'is' the State, henceforth citizen. No other is allowed.
His inspiration was the end of a stick to adhere to the State.
Trond: The sound from 1:01 - 1:10 was intended to make people cringe, add a grim audio feel to the visual.

I'll be making a comedy the next go around that is for sure!
Or should I say, that is for sure, eh!

Dick Mays · January 18th, 2014, 09:49 AM

Hey Bill,

I felt uncomfortable watching it. In my own films, I go for that quite a bit, and then have to hear people tell me that they felt uncomfortable, as if that is a negative. Nice mood piece, Of course, you are probably now on an NSA terror watch list for making it. That is all. The state is all.

January 14th, 2014, 07:26 PM	#1
Bill Thesken Major Player Join Date: May 2008 Location: HI, USA Posts: 622	Feedback - 'Citizen' by Bill Thesken I tried something different style wise. For these DVinfo challenges I've made films about natural science, underwater biology, a couple of spoofs, a few comedies, a spiritual film or two, surfing. For some reason I suddenly wanted to make something quick and gritty and dark, something that scared the hell out of me. Technical: GH2, stock lens. Zoom H4N. Sennheiser lav mic. Filmed in full color HD, edited with film effects in Vegas Pro 9. In a grim future world. When the State Controls All. "Citizen" http://vimeopro.com/user517265/citizen

January 14th, 2014, 07:42 PM	#2
Tim Lewis Major Player Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: Perth, Western Australia. Posts: 591	Re: Feedback - 'Citizen' by Bill Thesken Bill It was an interesting piece with good use of sound and video effects to convey the mood. I did find that the lush green growth the farmer produced to be a little to fresh and good for a dystopian world. Maybe that is from a time long past? Cheers Tim __________________ Cheers Tim

January 15th, 2014, 04:37 AM	#3
Trond Saetre Inner Circle Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Bergen, Norway Posts: 3,375	Re: Feedback - 'Citizen' by Bill Thesken Hi Bill, Another interesting film from you. I enjoyed watching. A detail: I didn't really catch the meaning of the sound effect from 1:01 - 1:10. Sounded kinda like a jet flying by and also a little distorted. Thank you for sharing.

January 17th, 2014, 12:26 AM	#4
Lorinda Norton Wrangler Join Date: Nov 2001 Location: Southwest Idaho, USA Posts: 3,066	Re: Feedback - 'Citizen' by Bill Thesken Bill, you sure succeeded in doing something completely out of the ordinary! Thank you for leaving most to the imagination; I'm not in the mood for too much realism. Gritty is a good word for describing this piece, so if you wanted to be consistent, Tim's thoughts about the lush colors of the produce, past or present, are certainly worth pondering. As always, I appreciate the thoughtfulness you put into your work. Thanks for yet another interesting entry! __________________ Lorinda

January 17th, 2014, 01:14 AM	#5
Bill Thesken Major Player Join Date: May 2008 Location: HI, USA Posts: 622	Re: Feedback - 'Citizen' by Bill Thesken Thanks for the comments, and for watching. I made this piece with 3 perspectives, Outside / Inside-Outside / Inside. 3 distinct film looks, black and white, old 80's film, and HD. ie: The interrogator's view/ the prisoner explaining himself to his detainees/ and then as he's being physically destroyed for not giving the right answer, his 'inner' vision of his little farm which is prohibited along with anything else not approved by the State, grasping for the clear color vision as it turns to black and white with his destruction. "State your name" Your name 'is' the State, henceforth citizen. No other is allowed. His inspiration was the end of a stick to adhere to the State. Trond: The sound from 1:01 - 1:10 was intended to make people cringe, add a grim audio feel to the visual. I'll be making a comedy the next go around that is for sure! Or should I say, that is for sure, eh!

January 18th, 2014, 09:49 AM	#6
Dick Mays Major Player Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Atlanta, GA Posts: 690	Re: Feedback - 'Citizen' by Bill Thesken Hey Bill, I felt uncomfortable watching it. In my own films, I go for that quite a bit, and then have to hear people tell me that they felt uncomfortable, as if that is a negative. Nice mood piece, Of course, you are probably now on an NSA terror watch list for making it. That is all. The state is all.