DVC5 Feedback - Tracks of Reality

Sean McHenry · April 15th, 2006, 12:30 AM

Kudos from me too. Nice job. The dialog might need a bit of refining but for a first effort, very nice.

I am amazed by the quality level of these later DVChallenges. It's getting really good. Here in Columbus we are lucky to have a shorts festival that is open to everyone that makes any short video/film projects as long as they are from Central Ohio. All you have to do is submit something, nobody is turned away for quality or content issues. That's a great thing. I would put any of the videos that have been in these challenges in there with them and they would be able to hold their own. This is another fine example of folks doing something they are compelled to do - that's art.

Good job.

Sean McHenry

Robert Kirkpatrick · April 15th, 2006, 12:29 PM

Your shot compositions were nicely done. Very evocative use of location -- I really got a strong sense of place, like in Introspectacle.

Riley Harmon · April 15th, 2006, 07:00 PM

Excellent short, nuff said

Dick Mays · April 16th, 2006, 01:08 AM

I'll echo what many others said. Absolutely BEAUTIFUL pictures. You have an eye for composition and could be my D.P. anytime. However, I knew where the story was going way before it was over. Throw a change-up into your next short. Convince the audience where it is going, and then don't go there. And keep making pictures. You got the eye!

Richard Zlamany · April 16th, 2006, 10:56 PM

Great work and a pleasure to view.

The cinematography, music, the monologue, and editing were excellent.

Chris Barcellos · April 17th, 2006, 05:13 PM

Okay, like everyone else said, the images were fantastically cinematic. But I felt that the naration colored the images to much, and did not leave the viewer to draw his or her own conclusions about what was being said. I know with limited time we all could do only what we could do, but I think, with a little addition here and there, you had enough emotion and suggestion in the visuals to say what you wanted to without using all the narration.

April 15th, 2006, 12:30 AM	#16
Sean McHenry Trustee Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Hilliard, Ohio Posts: 1,193	Kudos from me too. Nice job. The dialog might need a bit of refining but for a first effort, very nice. I am amazed by the quality level of these later DVChallenges. It's getting really good. Here in Columbus we are lucky to have a shorts festival that is open to everyone that makes any short video/film projects as long as they are from Central Ohio. All you have to do is submit something, nobody is turned away for quality or content issues. That's a great thing. I would put any of the videos that have been in these challenges in there with them and they would be able to hold their own. This is another fine example of folks doing something they are compelled to do - that's art. Good job. Sean McHenry __________________ ‘I don’t know what I’m doing, and I’m shooting on D.V.’ - my hero - David Lynch http://www.DeepBlueEdit.com

April 17th, 2006, 05:13 PM	#21
Chris Barcellos Inner Circle Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Elk Grove CA Posts: 6,838	Okay, like everyone else said, the images were fantastically cinematic. But I felt that the naration colored the images to much, and did not leave the viewer to draw his or her own conclusions about what was being said. I know with limited time we all could do only what we could do, but I think, with a little addition here and there, you had enough emotion and suggestion in the visuals to say what you wanted to without using all the narration. __________________ Chris J. Barcellos

April 15th, 2006, 12:29 PM	#17
Robert Kirkpatrick Regular Crew Join Date: May 2004 Location: Little Rock, AR Posts: 199	Your shot compositions were nicely done. Very evocative use of location -- I really got a strong sense of place, like in Introspectacle.

April 15th, 2006, 07:00 PM	#18
Riley Harmon Major Player Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Oklahoma Posts: 424	Excellent short, nuff said

April 16th, 2006, 01:08 AM	#19
Dick Mays Major Player Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Atlanta, GA Posts: 690	I'll echo what many others said. Absolutely BEAUTIFUL pictures. You have an eye for composition and could be my D.P. anytime. However, I knew where the story was going way before it was over. Throw a change-up into your next short. Convince the audience where it is going, and then don't go there. And keep making pictures. You got the eye!

April 16th, 2006, 10:56 PM	#20
Richard Zlamany Major Player Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Hamden CT Posts: 470	Great work and a pleasure to view. The cinematography, music, the monologue, and editing were excellent.