Hi there, have a look at my short. It was shot on Mini Dv except the bathroom scene was shot on 1080i50 through capture now in final cut.

have a look and let me know what you think!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pLAxlFgpBrE

Thanks

Narayan

I think the cinematography after he leaves the house is excellent. Inside the house it's sort of mediocre/nothing special. It's a good art film and my interpretation is that he is reflecting his thoughts for the day, hence his reflection following him. I'm not sure why the environment was reversed, maybe is it because he was thinking about the past? The flowers would have looked better without the plastic.

I spotted a glitch/mistake, you probably already fixed it but here it is anyway.
http://img102.imageshack.us/img102/7813/mistakekd0.jpg

Also, the colours don't look to bad but they are a little flat. I don't know if you colour corrected or not but I would have made them with more contrast/brightness/curves correction. Here are some examples of what I mean.
http://img102.imageshack.us/img102/264/37961260jw9.jpg
http://img102.imageshack.us/img102/4711/13195485vu2.jpg
http://img102.imageshack.us/img102/9014/96133583jz9.jpg

Well, it was well done though. I didn't close the video after 10 seconds, which is rare. You kept my attention from beginning to end.

Thanks for your comment Justin.
I actually took some color out (desaturation) to reflect the sadness in the charachter.
I have fixed the gliches, well as well as I could. I just cropped both sides of the image, it was ok on my tv but not on youtube. But i haven't put i up on the net yet.
I reversed everything because the charachter's thoughts are some where else, in the past, as you thought. And your dead on with the flowers, I should have taken that ugly plastic off.
Thanks alot for your comment and suggestions.

narayan

Hi Narayan,

Well done, it's a nice moody little film. Really well framed and shot. It relaly get's the alienated mood across. The glitch Justin spotted also pops up in the scene on the train platform. The reason it look OK on you TV is becuase television sets overscan, and trim the edges off. (see here (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Safe_area) for more info)

I'd concur with Justin that it's a little gloomy visually, and not necessarily in a good way. The colours (or lack of them) are fine but I think you need to dial in a little more contrast, if only for YouTube. It may look better on a decent TV screen but web video doesn'ty do justice to dark under exposed video.

Hi Narayan,

I liked your film.
It had a kind of melancholic mood which was perfectly supported by the soundtrack.

I agree with Dylan about the contrast, although it didn't bother me that much. I only noticed the glitches in a few scenes, but that can be fixed easily.

Very well done!


Andre.

Nice taht you liked the film. It got accepted in the galway film fleadh film festival in ireland, i gave them a print with the glitches fixed. Unfortunatly i could not attent the screening since im traveling around india for 2 months! in kasgmir now and its beautiful!

thanks man

AS I commented on youtube - excellent direction and cinematoraphy. I watched it a few times. Superb work.

I'm on the Isle of Man Narayan and always looking for people to colaberate with in making films.

Yeah i enjoy making movies with everyone! I live in Dublin for college but my familly home is in county mayo. glad you enjoyed my piece.