I'm doing an ad for a magazine


http://www.droptodesign.com/test/Ad%204%20bw.jpg

http://www.droptodesign.com/test/Ad%204%20color%20copy.jpg

and there is a significant price difference in the color. Thanks for your input. BTW the res on these is very small compared to the original graphic, so please ignore the fuzzy fonts.

i prefer the Bllack and white

okies, well a couple of things..

is ths for a magazine?

i think remove the text on the lower right.
Less is more when it comes to instant wow factor and just move the "capturing your dreams" over to the gap in the lwoer right
I also think the Drop to Design logo is a little big... i dont know.. it just doesnt feel right and its a busy image.. i thnk its the film sprocket holes thats doing it??

Do u want to see my ad? Its very differnt.. its got my logo on there, one large image, 3 smaller ones, 2 logos and a website and fone number.

Mines a bit trippy though... coz im trying to convey a diferent type of mentality of video to potential clients..

Im hopign that when people see the ad, they go WOW...
Hell its costing me enough, and its my first print ad...

im just trying to find a free host.. file den looks alright..
brb with a link for ya

Try that one.. just copy and paste it..

sorry bout the huge size though...

Check your SPELLING:

Customizable is correct (you put Customisable which is incorrect)

i prefer the Bllack and white

okies, well a couple of things..

is ths for a magazine?

i think remove the text on the lower right.
Less is more when it comes to instant wow factor and just move the "capturing your dreams" over to the gap in the lwoer right
I also think the Drop to Design logo is a little big... i dont know.. it just doesnt feel right and its a busy image.. i thnk its the film sprocket holes thats doing it??

Do u want to see my ad? Its very differnt.. its got my logo on there, one large image, 3 smaller ones, 2 logos and a website and fone number.

Mines a bit trippy though... coz im trying to convey a diferent type of mentality of video to potential clients..

Im hopign that when people see the ad, they go WOW...
Hell its costing me enough, and its my first print ad...

im just trying to find a free host.. file den looks alright..
brb with a link for ya


Excellent comments, I'll hack away at it this weekend some more. I have little bit of cushion on my deadline. I have no problem getting rid of the right text, I've been struggling with what to put there, what makes the best sense.


Yes, Peter, it's a bridal magazine ad.

Check your SPELLING:

Customizable is correct (you put Customisable which is incorrect)

Thank you Ed, that's my southern twang playing with my brain.

It's kind of a split between color and b&w. Color obviously would draw more attention in an ad but you have to weight the price to benefit differencial.

One note, and this is strictly from a subjective graphic design standpoint: It's a little busy. Not that there are too many graphical elements, rather the logo competes with the background too much. I'd suggest lowering the opacity of the background or thickening up that "Evanescent" font.

Hey Steven,

Coming from a graphics background a couple of things caught my eye right off the bat. The text in the lower left is black on black. Even though the edge is thin white, I think the readability and impact would be greater if you inverted the black text to white. The 'Drop to Design' font isn't doing it for me... Seems incomplete or lacking something. I'm not sure I like the way the O sits on the R and the T seems to float in its own orbit.. The font seems a bit thin to me as well.

I'd play around with different fonts and see what looks good, easy to read.. you might need to kern out the text for proper spacing.

Overall look to making it less busy whether it means reshuffling the text around or the graphics.

I see what you have in mind and its not bad at all. Just needs some tweaking.

From a graphic design point of view it could use a bunch of work.

It is too busy

You have two different fonts but they are too close in style and size

The film sproket idea doen't really work

The text is not laid out in a graphicly interesting way, with eye pleaseing spacing.

Try getting rid of all the BS, it's just about the hands with rings and beautiful fonts. You are trying to send too many messages at the same time and none are getting through well enough.



Mike

Thanks for the feedback, I'm working on http://droptodesign.com/test/Ad%20Final.jpg right now.