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William Gardner
April 13th, 2006, 06:45 AM
Since my film got posted, I'll start off the Feedback threads.

My film is "Love Bites".

And for those who are interested, it was shot with a Sony Z1U camera, used Sennheiser G2 (?) wireless kit for sound (had a non-shotgun mike semi-boomed in for many shots, but ended up using the wireless lav for most), a Lowell light kit, and a Manfrotto tripod. It was edited on Premiere Pro 1.5 with the Cineform AspectHD codec/software, and used After Effects for the effects and titles.

This is my first shot at fiction, so please be kind if possible... :)

Cheers!
Bill

Meryem Ersoz
April 13th, 2006, 10:23 AM
this was pretty cute. nice use of location. that whole "location" requirement seems to be helping us to make better entries, i think.

the structure of it is nice and tight. it has a nice, light touch and sense of humor about it. good job!

Hugh DiMauro
April 13th, 2006, 10:31 AM
Bill, you humble bas***d!

What a story idea! Some poor schlub becomes a vampire and figures out a way to turn it into a blessing? Good music, great use of locations, FABULOUS "golden hour" shots and perfect FX mirror stuff. A mini "buddy" picture! I Loved it! Very original idea and use of storytelling tricks to move the script along in a coherent, entertaining fashion. You definitely spitballed that idea well. Alot of work went into that story arc. Thank you for an entertaining piece.

Lorinda Norton
April 13th, 2006, 11:13 AM
Good heavens! What an enterprising and resourceful vampire! Fun story, Bill. (Gotta love a lady vampire who takes the time to apply a bandaid before she leaves.) :)

Technically speaking, this movie (your work) is incredible. Beautiful shots, great cuts (really like the scene on the street with the cars!). And I agree with Hugh that the scenes with mirrors are so cool. I loved the tennis ball tossing, plus the fact that the guy in the liquor store couldn't see the vampire in the mirrors. LOL! Before I forget, what did he steal from there?

Your hard work paid off. This is a great movie. And I did what you asked--waited on the large wmv. It was worth it!

Bradley L Marlow
April 13th, 2006, 11:13 AM
Hi Bill - great job!

I liked the quirky humor that you used in your film. Gave it a nice feel. Loved the kid vampire (Alex)- especially the way he rolled his eyes. Hilarious! Your FX sequence with the mirror and tennis ball was terrific. Thought your use of locations worked very well too.

At first I thought, "What is this young boy doing in a Liquor Store?" Then knew- "Well! This kid can pretty much do whatever he wants!"

PS: I would like to acquire one of those female vampire ladies. Any help here is greatly appreciated.

Best Wishes~
Bradley

Chris Barcellos
April 13th, 2006, 11:28 AM
Great filming, location shots, and great editing and great effects. Not sure if being able to get a bottle of booze solved his inability to work days, but it certainly would make it easier for him to get through the days.....

Jerry Porter
April 13th, 2006, 11:36 AM
I liked it alot. The closing sequence really tied it all together for me.

William Gardner
April 13th, 2006, 11:46 AM
Thanks for the kind words, everybody.

I originally wanted the closing sequence to come before the credits, but ran out of time with the 5 minute limit. Hopefully, folks will check that out as I think it helps pull it together. In the "extended" version, the shots of Jay leaving the stores is intercut with shots of his booty being sold on Ebay. Again, I think this makes it more understandable but I couldn't squeeze that into the 5 minute requirement.

Thanks again! Looking forward to seeing everybody else's work!

Bill
PS: For those looking for sexy vampire dates, check out
www.vampire_escorts.com
:)

Bradley L Marlow
April 13th, 2006, 11:53 AM
Thanks for the link Bill. I used all of my credit cards, sucked a paypal account dry, wrote two rubber checks and am told she will arrive in 8 days. I'm checking the tracking number now.

Edward Slonaker
April 13th, 2006, 12:15 PM
Nice, nice, NICE, Bill! Really liked the night shots and the tennis ball/mirror sequence. Very well done.

I really need to dust off my Total Training DVDs on AE.....@#$%!

Ed.

Philip Gioja
April 13th, 2006, 12:50 PM
I really liked the mirror effects -- how did you do that? (Or is that a magician's secret?)

I liked the story idea, pretty clever. I guess my one hangup is just that he has to resort to petty theft to support his blood habit, which I guess is morally better than the normal flesh fare, but felt a little depressing or flat or something at the end. Still really great stuff though -- great film. We had a good time here at the office checking it out over lunch.

Michael Fossenkemper
April 13th, 2006, 01:11 PM
Great effects. looks like it took a fair bit of time in post. Some really nice shots too. Good take on the reflections bit. Ok, can everyone stop raising the bar?

Robert Martens
April 13th, 2006, 02:02 PM
Now these are the kind of effects I love most--you've got your explosions, and your Balrogs, and they have their place, but the simple stuff that actually advances the storytelling gets me every time. Relatively simple, that is, I know how much work goes into making even a few seconds of this kind of thing.

The tennis ball, the kid rolling his eyes, all those slick looking location shots, I'm very, very impressed. And I personally feel the end sequence is better this way, as opposed to what you described; a few quick shots of the character walking away from the stores in the same fashion, it's very effective, and made me laugh.

Excellent job!

Tyler Baptist
April 13th, 2006, 02:03 PM
Solid gold! Really fun and inventive, and I laughed so hard when they went into the liquor store, and I cued in on the genius idea of how you played with the cameras and mirrors there to create a definately unique spin on the vampire genre. Well written, well paced, hilarious, and damn entertaining! Good work!

Hugo Pinto
April 13th, 2006, 02:34 PM
Really good concept, really fun script, and really good shooting.

I can only imagine the effort the FX shots must have been!

It made me laugh hard. That alone must be a sign of success.

Hugo

Steve Shilson
April 13th, 2006, 06:03 PM
Bill, everything I wanted to say has already been said. It was fantastic! The story was very clever and original and I really loved the tennis ball scene, awesome! There's so many little things in this film that truly make it so good for me. Props go out to you!

William Gardner
April 13th, 2006, 07:59 PM
Thanks again everybody for the kind words.

Yes, it did take a bunch of hours with After Effects to get many of the effects shots done: mainly taking shots with and without the mirrors/reflecting surfaces and then stitching them together with animated masks.

The shot with the reflecting pool is actually totally faked: the night of the shoot there was too much wind and the pool was blown out so the reflection wasn't very clear. I decided to just fake the reflection by flipping and stretching the top portion of the scene and covering over the pool section with that part.

Next time, I think it would take less time and effort to just find a real vampire for the shoot... :)

Bill

Dick Mays
April 14th, 2006, 01:28 AM
Beautiful short. Good story, great pictures, neat effects.

Most people already pointed out the big stuff. But there are a lot of little touches that show the time you put into this short.

Ever time I watch a really good short, I pick out one or two things about it for me to rip off and use in my own work. I really liked the rack focus from the cross to his reaction. Got to do that sometime, the rack focus. But what made me really like this short was the "relationship." Great buddy movie. It takes a good friend to sit down and have a beer with you while you knock back a pint of A positive.

My favorite line...

"no wonder she didn't want to try the garlic bread."

Mark Utley
April 14th, 2006, 02:37 AM
Your mirror/water reflection shots were awesome! I don't watch a lot of movies and I wasn't aware that vampires can't be seen in reflections or photographs so it took me a minute to figure that out, haha (my own fault, not yours). Great work!

Bruce Broussard
April 14th, 2006, 10:22 AM
Very entertaining. The music was was well selected, effects were great. The first time I watched it I thought the ending was a bit thin, but watching more times, it seemed to close it nicely.

Volker Krieger
April 14th, 2006, 12:20 PM
At this time, this film is one of my favourites.
The effects look very "realistic" and fit perfectly to the story. The editing is perfect, too.

Sean McHenry
April 15th, 2006, 12:17 AM
Wow, look what happens when you're away from the forums a few days. This was great. You did a good job with the matte work. I think we might have you write up a tutorial on how you did it all, if you have time. As part of the idea behind the whole "contest" is to learn, it would be great to have you guys who are into effects show the rest of us how you did it.

Sometimes we know how Spielberg would do it but those of us on real working people budgets find more creative ways to get things done. This was the first and only one I have watched so far. If the rest are even close to this level, we are going to have some real fun this time 'round.

Good job!

Sean McHenry

William Gardner
April 15th, 2006, 07:05 AM
First, thanks again everybody. It's nice to hear that the hard work was appreciated.

I think we might have you write up a tutorial on how you did it all, if you have time. As part of the idea behind the whole "contest" is to learn, it would be great to have you guys who are into effects show the rest of us how you did it.


A semi-detailed summary is provided below. Please don't read this if you haven't seen the film yet: I don't want to tip people off to some of the mistakes I made in some of the effects until they've seen it. :)

Most of it was just done by shooting the scenes with and without the lead character and then animating masks to include the reflections at the appropriate time and space in After Effects. Of course, it all had to be done on a tripod so that the shots would align in space.

For the other shots I changed in After Effects:

. The shot with the friend waving his hands in front of and behind the lead character we shot with and without the lead there, counting out loud in the background "one one thousand, two one thousand, ..." so that the friend would be waving his hands at about the same speed for both shots. Even with this, I needed to adjust a frame or so to align them, and even with this, they're not perfect if you look closely... :(

. The ball shots used the reflection of the ball from the original shot masked over a shot of the reflection from when the lead actor wasn't there. The mask for ball needed to be created almost frame-by-frame, but luckily the ball in motion has a fairly constant shape so for the most part this was moving, rotating, and scaling a semi-fixed mask shape.

. The outdoor, car driving by shot: we shot that a bunch of times. I really wanted to have people walking by with their reflections showing in the building, then followed by the lead character running by without his reflection. However, this had to be timed right without cars driving by since I needed to add the reflection from another time and if cars were driving by they wouldn't match. We ended up with one good take of this, but the time between when the people walked out of frame and when the lead character entered was something like 4 seconds, and it slowed the movie down too much to keep that long pause in.

. The Sony Z1u camera I used has a shot transition effect that allows you to change zoom, exposure, or just about anything you want from one setting to another in an exact amount of time. This allowed me to do the "zoom out from the mirror to the aisle in the store" shot in a precise amount of time with and without the lead character there. I wasn't sure that the timing would work out exactly, but it ended up working perfectly: I had to do minimal work to get the zoom-out from both takes to align.

. The pond reflection had to be flipped and aligned to make it work (there really is a pond there, but the reflection was too windblown to make the desired effect work). I also had to animate that reflection to make it move naturally as the camera panned down from the building to the pond. I actually added the reflection with something like a 90% opacity to allow a little bit of the pond rippling be visible also, but I'm not sure that comes through much (particularly in the low res web versions).

. The closeup of the hand tapping the mirror without the reflection had to be painfully masked almost frame by frame. Good thing that one was so short!

. Glowing eyes were just adding a feathered oval on top of the appropriate eyeball at the appropriate time.

. The bite marks on his neck weren't dark enough, so I did something similar to those spots, but with a darker red oval.

. We found a fake blood recipe on the web, but it ended up looking too light after filming, so I had to go in and do color correction just on the spots where the blood appeared in the glass. I had to create an animated mask to track the glass and then superimposed the color corrected version on top.

There were also a few shots that we couldn't use because the lead character's reflection showed up unexpectedly (!). When he enters his friend's apartment his reflection appears in the door as he walks by, so we had to cut away from that early. And when he enters and leaves the store, he appears in the reflection in the glass door, so again, we cut away right before his reflection appears.

If you have any questions about a specific effect, let me know.

Cheers!
Bill

John C. Chu
April 15th, 2006, 09:11 AM
Another vote for "Love Bites"..my favorite so far!

Good story and concept, good editing, good cinematography and great acting.

Very clever and creative.

I really liked how you solved the problem with the blood bank:

You showed him walking in. You showed him walking out with a paper bag full of stuff. In between you showed a counter of the money being counted out.
Solves the problem of actually having to shoot inside the blood bank.

I don't know if you actually needed to show him drinking the stuff though. :-)

Excellent job!

Kris Holodak
April 15th, 2006, 09:15 AM
this is definitely one of my ranking favorites so far. If the rest get too much better than this I'm going to start feeling out of my league with my little puppy flick. My sister came over and I showed it to her last night. She said, "Are you going to add a comment on the vampire thread? Tell him I thought the effects were great!" And I will because they were.

Thanks for sharing how you did it.

Smile,
Kris

Robert Kirkpatrick
April 15th, 2006, 01:27 PM
I really liked this one. There's nothing much for me to add that hasn't already been said. I've tried doing the rotoscoping and masking stuff, so I know how much dedication that takes. It looks absolutely flawless.

BTW, was there even a girl in the bed during the opening shot?

And thanks for sharing your secrets. I wish I knew that countdown trick beforehand (for the arm waving) -- it would've helped my short immensely.

William Gardner
April 15th, 2006, 07:39 PM
BTW, was there even a girl in the bed during the opening shot?

The opening shots were me and my wife (who also provided the audio for the date) in the bed. I recorded the audio for the lead actor at another time and place. I have some very funny out-takes of him sitting on a couch, kissing his arm and moaning and groaning... :)

Bill

Mugurel Dragusin
April 17th, 2006, 03:04 AM
Great piece of work. I mostly enjoyed the music which matches the style.

Brendan Marnell
April 18th, 2006, 12:39 PM
No need to be kind about Love Bites.

Even without the sound I enjoyed it greatly. Concept was simple but clever. Continuity never faltered. Generally underlit, suited the context. Editing was really tight. The incredible was made credible and entertaining. Best of all, you developed the "theme" in an original (to me) direction. Now I must listen to the sound ... hope it's not all drawl and hammers.

William Gardner
April 18th, 2006, 02:17 PM
Even without the sound I enjoyed it greatly...

Now I must listen to the sound ... hope it's not all drawl and hammers.

Not sure I understand this: was there a problem with the sound playback? If you saw it without sound, I'm not sure how you understood any of it?! :) If there some problem with the file, let me know and I'll try to resolve it.

Thanks,
Bill

Brendan Marnell
April 18th, 2006, 03:54 PM
The sound problem was all my fault, William. Just fixed it and enjoyed Love Bites (for third time) all the more. Still comes over neat and understated. Looking forward to your next movie.

BTW the bits I missed even on second viewing without the sound were:

- That you had been "vampired" in bed
- That the surgical dressing referred precisely to that event & time

... so I assumed on second viewing that you had got bitten somehow.

My sister who saw it without sound said it went completely over her head. Guess my advantage was that Boss Croker (& Samuel Beckett) used to live just up the road here from Leopardstown.

William Gardner
April 18th, 2006, 03:57 PM
My sister who saw it without sound said it went completely over her head.

I'm not surprised! :)

Bill