View Full Version : Short Narrative with stock A1


Takashi Doscher
April 27th, 2009, 10:05 PM
This is my latest short film. Less than 5 minutes long.

Please let me know what you think.

Cerrado Al Publico - "Closed to the Public" on Vimeo (http://www.vimeo.com/3287735)

Jim Miller
April 28th, 2009, 10:14 AM
Very nice work. Totally unexpected ending. You got me!

Scott Saracen
April 29th, 2009, 10:05 AM
Fantastic job Takashi. Great execution (no pun intended), nothing bad to say.

Jason Sharaba
April 29th, 2009, 03:11 PM
Very nice indeed!!

Eduardo Miguel
April 29th, 2009, 07:42 PM
Great job!! You really got me with the ending. Very meta.

Takashi Doscher
April 29th, 2009, 10:01 PM
Thank you very much for the nice comments!

but what does meta mean?

Claudio Musiari
May 3rd, 2009, 05:41 AM
Creat work! Did u mount some Letus or shot with the built in lenses? Any preset? Compliments for your work.

Takashi Doscher
May 3rd, 2009, 07:21 PM
Thank you for the nice comments. We shot this stock with the A1. No letus or additional lenses. I believe we used the PANALOOK preset found in these forums, but some significant grading was done afterwards.

Thank you for watching and any additional criticisms would be very welcome. We are always trying to improve.

Scott Gold
May 5th, 2009, 11:43 AM
Great story telling! Had me on the edge of my seat.

Eduardo Miguel
May 13th, 2009, 12:08 PM
This is what is Meta film is-

From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
Similar to metafiction in technique, the style of the film-making shows that the film is a metaphor about the production of the film and that the audience is tied in with the drama unfolding on the screen. Examples of this would be Federico Fellini's 8½, Maurizio Nichetti's "Ladri di saponette, François Truffaut's Day for Night, Jean-Luc Godard's Le Mepris, Spike Jonze's Adaptation., Living in Oblivion by Tom DiCillo, J.J. Lask's On the Road with Judas, Michael Powell's Peeping Tom, Farah Khan's Om Shanti Om and Zoya Akhtar's Luck By Chance.

Again, I really enjoyed this short film. It is different, but unique, and captivating. We need more work like yours - keep it up. And the XHA1 definitely shows what it is capable of once again.

Luca Ghione
May 17th, 2009, 10:41 AM
great work; it's a beautiful idea,

Robert Wide
May 21st, 2009, 01:11 AM
Great, very inspiring!! Great story & quality!

Robert

Christian Nachtrieb
May 29th, 2009, 07:54 AM
very good, I really liked it. the ending surprised me because I was thinking that when you hear the radio crackle right before he shoots.. that it would be his partners pulling a prank on him. my only criticism is the audio when the two spanish speaking men begin talking. it sounds too clean. the perspective should be from the guy on the toilet, so maybe muffle it a little bit and make it more echoey, because they're in a tight space. awesome work though,

Chris

Kevin Lewis
May 29th, 2009, 10:15 PM
AWSOME! I was glued the whole time!