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Marj Atkins
February 18th, 2009, 12:59 AM
The video I have submitted is a selection of clips that I have managed to collect so far but without the supporting animations or voice-over to explain things.

Most of my time has been spent trying to capture footage that I will only find during the summer so I have not had time to do a full storyboard for you even though I have everything laid out for myself.

I suggest you read my outline before you watch my video as it will explain where I am going with all this.

Here is the link to my video. (53MB)


By design (#1) selected clips on Vimeo (http://www.vimeo.com/3255198)

Chris Swanberg
February 18th, 2009, 02:23 AM
Marj..

WOW, what a terrific idea. I for one will be anxious to see how this pulls together. I really like the concept.

Chris S.

Jennie Stenhouse
February 18th, 2009, 04:53 AM
Hey Marj

Just read your out line :) I too am doing green screen, animations effects etc. Exciting isn't it I always love trying out new techniques. I look forward to hearing how you go! I am going to be doing some green screen stuff this weekend , ( well actually using a Red block as my stand in object ) will put notes up when i am done


good luck it sounds like its going to be amazing!

Mat Thompson
February 18th, 2009, 09:13 AM
Marj - I'm loving the concept and the angle you are taking. Exciting and creative thinking and I know you have the film making ability to make this something special. Your outline is well written and structured. I have some critiques (as always;-) but I'm trying to make sure I don't fall out of the running at the first hurdle with my own entry, so it may take a few days to get back with my thoughts. At the moment I just wanted to say......'splendid'!

Dale Guthormsen
February 18th, 2009, 09:31 AM
Marge,

A terrific start to be certain!! Awesome images. I too love the concept. haven't seen the outline yet, Will look at thaqt later.

Per Johan Naesje
February 19th, 2009, 01:29 AM
Marj, a very interesting idea for your long-form. Look forward to view and read about your progress. If someone could manage to do something like this, you're the one!

Thanks for sharing!

Catherine Russell
February 19th, 2009, 12:28 PM
Hi Marj:

Your talent awes and inspires! Really cool take on your topic. I wonder if fractals come into play anywhere in nature?

I remember a physics professor once said, "God is a mathematician of the highest order". Your stunning cinematography is going to document how he was right!

I always look forward to your work.

Cat

Marj Atkins
February 19th, 2009, 11:21 PM
Just to say thank you for all your comments. I will respond to these and give comments to all your movies in due course - just really struggling with time at the moment.

Chris Barcellos
February 19th, 2009, 11:44 PM
Very beautiful, Marj !!

Andrew Hood
February 21st, 2009, 09:14 AM
Nice idea Marj. Entertaining and intriguing would be a good way to go - rather than the math / biology lesson for sure. Possibly using a few simple examples and diagrams, and a minimum of words to explain the concepts. I like the footage you've got. There's something tranquil about it.

Wonder how that compares to cellular automata?

Finn-Erik Faale
February 21st, 2009, 09:57 AM
Your film cuts are tasteful; the message looks simple and clear.
I have also enjoyed your previous UWOL films. It seems to me that you are not only smart enough to find good solutions, but you have the right aesthetic taste.
Is it just your inherited characteristics?

Finn-Erik

Bryce Comer
February 21st, 2009, 08:28 PM
Wow Marj,
What a really interesting angle on nature. It sounds like you really know what you are talking about, & that coupled with the high quality of footage you have should make for an intriguing piece for sure. I can't wait to see it.
Bryce

Steve Siegel
February 21st, 2009, 09:53 PM
My Lord, Marj, what a topic. After reading your file I looked up Fibonacci numbers and saw some examples from nature. I then went to your sunflower and counted the spiral rows. 34...a Fibonacci number! Astounding. I can't wait to see how you explain this. Wil you try to start from DNA? You may have a problem showing tightly-packed rows to your audience in a brief time. I guess that is where the animation comes in. Have you found different Fibonacci numbers in different parts of the same plant?

Geir Inge
February 22nd, 2009, 05:15 AM
Hi Marj.
Like your plan for Uwol Long Form very much.
I just got me a new book that is about nature by design. It's great reading :)
Great footage and I'm looking forward to se more of your film.

Geir Inge

Trond Saetre
February 22nd, 2009, 11:23 AM
Hi Marj,

You have a nice and interesting plan.
I can't wait to follow the development of your project!
Good luck!

Marj Atkins
February 23rd, 2009, 09:53 AM
Thanks to you all - really appreciate the time you have taken to comment. Apologies for taking so long to respond. Just to respond to some of you directly:

Jennie
Glad to know there is someone else as daft as me! I do agree that trying out new techniques is exciting but at the same time it does have its disadvantages - and I’ll speak for myself here when I say - I am going to have to do everything a dozen times before getting them right. That’s the reason I decided to use this long form opportunity - at least I have a year to mess things up and redo them.

Much of this is new to me. I tried the green screen thing and it’s not easy. Some of my large sunflower heads were done using a green screen - purely as experiments.
Have you done green screen work before? Using a red block is a good idea to check out lighting and things. You may have to go to a blue screen if your objects have a lot of green in them - like my sunflowers. Do you have a proper screen or are you using a home-made one? Lots of questions - will check out your thread to find out how you get on.

Thanks Mat - I really appreciate all your constructive comments because they are always spot on - so please keep them coming.

Per - sometimes I wonder why I do things like this. I just can’t seem to keep things simple but thanks for your vote of confidence - hope I can do justice to it!

Cat
Yip, fractals are found in roots, branches, veins and look closely at the cauliflower the next time you prepare it for a meal - wonderful stuff hey?

Andrew
I think that’s the way to go - simple and to the point - and allowing the images to tell the story.

An interesting question about cellular automata but I don’t know enough about the subject to comment. I am aware of the ‘foxes and hares’ model (it was one of those wow things we used to run when PCs first came out) and that some things in nature generate pigment patterns that are natural cellular automata. Would be interesting to find out though.

Finn-Erik
Thank you Finn-Eric - not sure how to respond to that - but let’s just say I pay a great deal of attention to composition - most of the time anyway.

(Sometimes I get so excited about trying to capture my subject before it disappears that all of that goes out the window and when I am tired and not concentrating the wheels fall off as well and I end up with junk. I must say that I was caught off guard by the sunflower time lapses. When I first started one sunflower did its own choreography and ended up out of the picture despite the fact that I arranged it neatly in the frame. After that I checked regularly although I did have to leave the camera to run over night at times and things happened while I was asleep.)

I have had training in fine art which helps a bit when it comes to understanding the principles of composition, if that answers your question.

Steve,
I think I will start with the mathematics and work my way from there. DNA will come into my story somewhere though. BTW - try counting in the opposite direction.

Geir - what a coincidence - what is your book called? - guess it’s in Norwegian.

Once again thanks to everyone who commented.

Marj

Geir Inge
February 23rd, 2009, 10:10 AM
Thanks to you all ...
Geir - what a coincidence - what is your book called? - guess it’s in Norwegian.
Once again thanks to everyone who commented.
Marj

Hi Marj.
Yes, it is a norwegian book by a man called Arild Hagen.
Here's a link to the book (in norwegian) and also to some of the pictures in it.
Link: Naturens former » Bokklubben (http://www.bokklubben.no/SamboWeb/side.do?rom=AK&dokId=544072)

Maybe you can get some ideas from it?
Try this link too, and see if you can get to some more pictures from it:
Naturens former » Bokklubben (http://www.bokklubben.no/SamboWeb/side.do?dokId=544071) &style=popup

Really nice pictures if you ask me :)

Geir Inge

Marj Atkins
February 23rd, 2009, 10:15 AM
Thanks Geir! - will take a look.

Marj Atkins
February 23rd, 2009, 12:46 PM
Hey Geir - just had a look at those pictures. They are really beautiful. Thanks for the links!
Marj

Meryem Ersoz
February 23rd, 2009, 05:09 PM
fantastic subject, i know you've been wanting to work on this topic for awhile, glad there is an opportunity here.

beautiful macro, as always...

Marj Atkins
February 23rd, 2009, 10:51 PM
Funnily enough Meryem - if you are referring to the 'Patterns in Nature" topic that I suggested - I would not have been able to use this mathematics subject because it would be impossible to explain in a three minute movie. I had another idea up my sleeve for that.

Mihali Moore
February 26th, 2009, 04:44 AM
Marj,

What a great idea for a film. Something slightly different from the norm.
I am a big fan of timelapse stuff and your footage looks great.

Jeff Hendricks
March 1st, 2009, 10:06 AM
Marj,
This is such a wonderful idea for a film. I can see this film being used to teach the concept to math students. Fibonacci sequences are absolutely fascinating and totally mind boggling to me. I am a teacher for students who have disabilities here in the US and just a couple of years ago I met a teacher who was talking to her math students about the phenomenon and ever since I have been flabbergasted by the way in which nature displays order… and chaos for that matter. I am very excited to see your final film and learn something. The film you submitted is beautiful and very pleasing to watch I found myself entranced.

Mike Sims
March 1st, 2009, 09:47 PM
Marj,
This is always a fun subject and never covered enough. I confess, I would probably be happy with the math-biology lecture but I understand why you’re making it more of a celebration of math in nature. I know you are concentrating on plants now because of the season but I’m glad you aren’t leaving animals out. Gastropods, echinoderms and insect eyes all jump to mind but I’m sure you have a bevy of delights for us up your sleeve… Lovely!

Annie Haycock
March 2nd, 2009, 10:09 AM
A different point of view on a subject is always worthwhile. I guess I wouldn't go looking for the maths in nature, but will look forward to finding out more as the project goes on. This sequence is lovely on its own.

Mat Thompson
March 9th, 2009, 05:26 AM
Marj....well what can I say.

I think the film maker in you always seems to shine through. You have a unique and interesting premise and your project outline is good. At the next stage I'd like to see an expanded version of this where you include what sequences your coving within each section. Also more about how you intend you draw your conclusions back to beginning of your film. I think if you can find a clever or suprise way of doing this it could round things off very nicely indeed.

Your footage is awesome, well shot, interesting subjects, great levels of detail. The bee hive footage is a great example to everyone of building a sequence. Very nice indeed! I'm sure you have lots and lots more goodies in the planning especially as you also seem to be making this a technical learning activity.

I can't wait to see the results !
Mat

Marj Atkins
April 15th, 2009, 04:40 AM
Thanks once again for all your comments. I really appreciate your input. I have had my head down trying to meet a deadline, amongst other things, so I have not been able to get round here for a while. I have been doing my comments on your movies in between things but decided to finish them all before posting.
Thank you so much for all your encouragement - and inspiration I might add - there are some really stunning films in the making out there. I am sure we are going to see some amazing results.

Marj Atkins
May 14th, 2009, 11:48 AM
Today has not been my day. Usually I upload my video a day early to avoid this sort of thing and problems have never occurred. This time because I left it to the last moment, everything has gone wrong. I haven't been able to upload my video to the Uwol site at all as there is a glitch somewhere and it won't give me permission. Kevin will sort this out for me later today.

On top of that it has taken Vimeo 18 hours to finally process my video since I first uploaded it there! I haven't down-loaded it myself so I am not sure how big it is yet (it is 12 minutes long) I will do so tomorrow. I will also add the rest of my stuff then.

In the meantime here it the link to my video on Vimeo.

By Design #2 on Vimeo (http://www.vimeo.com/4638511)

Mat Thompson
May 14th, 2009, 03:44 PM
Hey Marj

I think your idea is fascinating and I'm going to be very interested to see the other areas of natures mathematical design that you are covering. You have some lovely shots and SO much colour....a feast for the eyes!

I know you've said this is going to be cut down but I did find it a little repetitive even though you were showing how widespread the number sequencing is. I think the could be aided by varying the nature of the visual delivery. Try using different types of shots, maybe jib shots, pans, reveals, differing angles etc etc. It just felt a bit like a classroom presentation in parts and this is after all a film.

It also might be good to explore more of the connections the flowers have with wildlife. 'Sub plots' to the main math story if you like. Attenboroughs, life of plants is a fantastic example of how its possible to make plants a fantastically interesting subject matter within a film. I have a big library of dvd's that I use for story structure reference and it definitely would be worth checking out this series to improve the delivery of what is a great premise for exploring the natural world.

Great stuff

Mat

Marj Atkins
May 15th, 2009, 05:09 AM
Hi Mat - thanks for your constructive comments I really appreciate the time you have taken and thanks for the encouragement and very helpful tips.


The problems you have highlighted are unfortunately part and parcel of putting up work that is still in progress. I was very reluctant to submit this because it is still in disarray - in my mind anyway - but I simply ran out of time. This is not a difficult subject - just complex as there is an immense amount of information that can be included. The difficulty is in deciding what is important and what is not and how much to include and how. My mind is rattling with facts at the moment.


When I work the first thing I always do is gather everything that I feel could be pertinent to the subject and once everything is in place start analyzing it, organizing it and consolidating it. I also usually gather more video images than is necessary to give myself some choice. I got as far as collecting the info and doing some superficial arranging of it to make it into a story that flows. This story was put together around the collected images specifically for this check point without which it would have been difficult to make any sense of it.


I haveto admit that I did feel reluctant to toss out some of the stuff before submitting this - holding onto favourites - but they will be gone once I get bored with them! Funnily, my thoughts when submitting it were - “Oh well they’ve got the biology/ math lesson here after all.” - not my intention for the final version though.


My idea is to make it a bit more than just a video about a number sequence applied to plants and try to put each plant into context as well. Maybe this is complicating things but it is in line with what you suggested about including insects and animals to make it more interesting. At this stage I am still busy with building the basics so I have no idea how much I will eventually be able to include.

I had intended to do this particular sequence in the springtime when there is plenty of scope for flower types, but ten days ago I came to the conclusion that the sequence we were busy working on would not be finished on time, so I opted to do this one quickly instead - which ironically also ended up not being completed properly on time!

It has been a mission to scrape together all the images required for the factual information I have. There are some missing images like the missing pineapple plant so some clips seem unnecessarily long, but if it becomes obvious that they are necessary for the final version they will be included.

I did not make any special effort with the voice-over and music as this is a temporary story version that will be discarded (a total waste of time, unfortunately, writing a story for a check point). The graphics too are very basic at the moment - just enough to get the message across.

One thing I was interested in finding out from you all - do you think it helps to have the number sequence at the bottom of the screen throughout? Does this give my sequence an unprofessional look? Do I have any alternatives?

I must say I never thought I would ever do a video on flowers and plants - never mind a long-form documentary - it is a subject that has never been particularly high on my video interest list except as context for other video. I have subsequently discovered that plants are actually amazingly interesting. I have also discovered they are impossible to video outdoors when doing close-ups or macro work, as even the slightest breeze makes them move just when you don’t want them to move. Unfortunately it is also very time-consuming and tedious to get them indoors to film - and impossible if you don’t own the plant in question!!


Just one other small thing: there is a slip at the end of my video where my title and graphics get a little mixed up - please ignore - it is a direct result of removing an image at the last minute and not checking.


Marj


Note: while waiting for Kevin’s help I used the opportunity to correct this slip as well as the credits in the version uploaded to the Uwol site. I also added a few missing transitions.

Marj Atkins
May 15th, 2009, 05:24 AM
(Sorry - This post was a double entry for some reason so I have removed its large amount of content. Can't delete it entirely)

Mat Thompson
May 15th, 2009, 05:25 AM
No problem. I do understand the 'wip' approach, but I thought it would make sense to bring up thoughts as I see them at this stage.


"One thing I was interested in finding out from you all - do you think it helps to have the number sequence at the bottom of the screen throughout? Does this give my sequence an unprofessional look? Do I have any alternatives?"

I think it is necessary to illustrate the point and I think your method was ok. I do think it could be done in a more visually stimulating way and once you've got the point across maybe its repetition should be more subtle.

Marj Atkins
May 15th, 2009, 05:40 AM
Thanks Mat

Appreciate your help.

Marj

Mat Thompson
May 15th, 2009, 05:55 AM
Oh and my suggestion. Would be to use some sort of scroll + highlight/enlarging effect. So bring on the the number sequence (making the numbers bigger) from one side. As it scrolls across it highlights the relevant numbers in the sequence you are taking about. If you need more explanation or an example of this then give me shout and I'll mock something up.

Marj Atkins
May 15th, 2009, 06:12 AM
Oh and my suggestion. Would be to use some sort of scroll + highlight/enlarging effect. So bring on the the number sequence (making the numbers bigger) from one side. As it scrolls across it highlights the relevant numbers in the sequence you are taking about. If you need more explanation or an example of this then give me shout and I'll mock something up.

Do you mean take out the continuous graphic of the numbers altogether and replace it with short versions of the same graphic that then scroll across the relevant sections while highlighting the numbers for that particular section?


Worth trying - if I understand you correctly although I'm just wondering if that won't make it a bit too busy?

Catherine Russell
May 15th, 2009, 11:06 AM
Hi Marj:

This is a fascinating topic, you narrate it well, the music is well suited and the color and beauty on display are breathtaking.

I have read over your discussions with Mat, and I think his suggestions are sound. I won't pile on because as you have said yourself, this is a works in progress and at this point you are getting the information, concept, visuals and narrative put together.... so that the real work of making it a film can then start to happen. So a critique on the "dynamic film" part of your work is way too premature this round.

I understand your sentiment of the woes associated with delivering a works in progress. Comments are made where you think to yourself, "of course! I'm going to do this!" But the beauty of this long form is that I'm finding that insightful comments are also made that I have never considered before, and it can shape and improve the entire make of the film with several more chances to work it in to the final product!

Mat's insights about broader sub plots held together by the mathematical principles found in plants is a good one, which I'm sure you are on route to do in later rounds.

As far as your number line at the bottom of your video I felt it worked well. I'm a hands on and visual person so the number line helped me understand what you were describing, much more so than if you didn't have it.

All the best. Your work is always an inspiration and a feast for the eyes.

Cat

Mat Thompson
May 15th, 2009, 12:10 PM
Hi Marj
Heres the sort of thing I had in mind. It needs some more thought graphically but the concept is there. It puts the relevant numbers within the sequence but makes the one your talking about obvious, delivers it, then takes you back to your clean footage.

This is done in max, which I think you have access too. If you want to take a look, just yell and I'll throw the file over on an email.

Mat

Marj Atkins
May 16th, 2009, 02:13 AM
Wow Mat - thanks so much for going to all the trouble of doing this. I'm impressed with your skills! I admit I did not visualize this when you described your idea and it does fit in pretty well with the math animations we have done already for another sequence.

Really appreciate your input!

Marj

Chris Swanberg
May 16th, 2009, 02:46 AM
The talents here, in so many disciplines, boggles my mind. I'd heard of Fibbonacci sequences but never related them to anything ... and BANG, along you come and tie math and nature together thru them. It really rocked my world a bit I admit. Good narration (a little distant sounding though, maybe closer and a little more volume? I dunno... didn't envelop me like it could have - just an observation).

Like Mat, I kind of envisioned the two sequence numbers under discussion having more animation or something to stand out as being a nice touch... I envisioned a magnifying glass, there the TWO active numbers in the string would be under the glass, and hence magnified over the rest. I don't think you want to detract from the image, but I think you need something to keep the viewer's eye engaged as you describe this facinating connection. (A zoom into the area or a rotating zoom, or arrows and lines depicting the rows under discussion ? Just thinking out loud here) Mat may have helped add that movement,and pizazz with his suggestion, or maybe you want to stagger various approaches including ones like his?

I too have concerns about how you can keep the viewer interested in the subject longer term. I know *I* would be, but people have short attention spans and need variety and motion. That is my sugggestion to you. The issue is fascinating by itself to curious minds, but add some motion, punch and variety to keep ALL your audience engaged. I think this may be your challenge here. The subject matter and images sure aren't.

I cannot wait to pop the Fibonacci number sequence on conifers around a campfire some night this summer. GREAT stuff!

Oh your footage, Superb. Top notch.

I am anxious to share this one with my friends ! Thanks Marj!

Chris Swanberg

Marj Atkins
May 16th, 2009, 02:49 AM
Thanks for you comments Cat. I really appreciate your ideas - and your feedback regarding the number line idea.

Marj

Marj Atkins
May 16th, 2009, 03:11 AM
Thanks Chris - lots of ideas and much appreciated. I guess most of us will be seeing maths in all sorts of wierd and wonderful places after this - just wait till you see the rest - it's truly mind-boggling.

Steve Siegel
May 17th, 2009, 04:28 PM
Marj,
It gets better and better. First of all, I think your voice is a big plus. I could listen to you all day long. It might be a good idea to say the numbers as they appear in your original
description of the Fibonacci sequence. Since it starts with zero, then one, then the one is repeated before going on, it is a bit confusing to someone who is unfamiliar with the concept of sum of previous two numbers give the next one. Also increased spacing between numbers might help. For continuity and to say that these numbers are part of the real world, I would superimpose the series over the previous scene instead of giving it its own blank background.
I find myself asking "why". You have to approach that, even if there is no answer but Divine Providence.
Somewhere after the pineapple you begin to discuss petal, sepal numbers, etc, and since you are only mentioning one number per plant (usually 5) the tie-in with Fibonacci becomes less obvious, and I find my train of thought wandering. It was all spirals. Now what is she saying?
Finally, I was confused with the Lucas series, and, having watched, still don't know what it is. Don't fall into the trap of trying to be all-inculsive in your explanations. It only can detract from what is a magnificent piece.

Marj Atkins
May 18th, 2009, 06:56 AM
Thanks for your feedback Steve - very helpful.

Your bit about my narration came as a surprise as I have generally been of the opinion that it is my weakest point. I have been hoping to find someone to do the final narration for me for this project.

This was all rushed together at the last minute (unintentionally) so I did not have time to do anything creative with it. The “Why?” will definitely be answered in another sequence - there is a very good reason for every little part of this (including the number of petals) and will become quite clear when this section is finally put into context.

Thanks for all your constructive suggestions. My basic graphics will become proper animations in the final project.

Per Johan Naesje
May 18th, 2009, 12:29 PM
Marj, first of all - what a beautiful scenes and colors you got here! Interesting topic too.
As others have said, it's a bit static to me. Different camera angle would have enhanged it a lot and maybe a time-laps (stop motion) too?

Will be interesting to watch your development to this one. Keep up your good work, Marj

Rob Evans
May 18th, 2009, 02:35 PM
Hi Marj,
Love your methodolgy and approach to this, your workload is fantastic!
I did begin to feel a little bombarded with too much similar information, and I felt that maybe that a few pauses here and there, to let the viewer absorb what they're seeing would might help. I really like your voice over - I think your voice works very well - have a little try perhaps at varying the tone and pace throughout - it can really help to enhance the viewers enjoyment and attention.
Image wise great detail shots. Wasn't so sure about some of the quick fades to very similar frames - just didn't sit well with me. A way around would be to flip the angle perhaps, or setup gentle pans for a little variety. Being incredibly picky, there were a couple of fades where the next sequence on the video track had flashed through for a frame or two. Watch out for these, because I know you'll only kick youself if you don't spot it 'til later on!!
But you have a very thorough, well researched and magical piece coming together here... best of luck with it!!!

Bryce Comer
May 23rd, 2009, 11:40 AM
Hi Marj,
Wow, what a piece you are putting together. I can't believe the depth of your knowledge! I too felt there was a bit too much information telling the same story, & like Rob had said, i felt you could have simply shown shots of other plants without the explanation, giving us time to simply absorb the information, & maybe think about how it works with the plant being shown, maybe even try to count the numbers for ourselves. Ok, so maybe that would take to long for a shot to be shown, but i guess you know what i mean.
Your footage is stunning, your subject is fascinating, & your knowledge of your subject is obviously vast. I am sure when this all comes together it will be just like your other UWOL submissions, & be a very polished, very professional piece & i am really looking forward to seeing more.
Regards,
Bryce

Jeff Hendricks
May 24th, 2009, 08:17 AM
Absolutely fascinating with beautiful images, interesting facts (That I had to rewind in order to absorb on occasion) and I must say that you have a beautiful and soothing voice.

Very professional and nicely done...I can't wait to see how you put it into a final form.

Marj Atkins
May 29th, 2009, 08:21 AM
I must say I really value the input from everyone. You have all helped so much in bringing my attention to little things that I hadn’t thought of and I will definitely have a better outcome as a result.

Per - Static clips are the biggest bug bear when it comes to doing macro work and I admit I didn’t put much thought into solving the problem due to the last minute rush. I think your idea of using some time lapse here is a very good one because I don’t have to touch the camera with time-lapse. As you know all too well touching the camera, even a little bit in close-up, knocks the image around wildly, never mind trying to pan with it in that mode. Fortunately, I have subsequently thought of a couple of solutions to this problem and I am busy working on it.

Rob - Thanks for your observations. Glad you picked up on some of those little things - I will check them out. This entire sequence is going to be reduced by half its length so much of the repetition will be gone. I have to balance things very finely - give enough information to make it easy to follow but keep it short enough to keep interest going.

Bryce - really appreciate your comments and thanks for your suggestions - very helpful - and every bit helps.

Jeff - a lot of work still to go but hopefully it will pull together in the end. Found your comments encouraging and helpful - my biggest problem is to find a way to convey info effectively so folk don’t have to rewind to absorb it or get bored with too much. I really don’t want to end up with a classroom lesson which is what I have here at the moment.

Geir Inge
July 7th, 2009, 03:00 PM
Hi Marj.
Great colors, crisp and clear.
Also like your VO, and as a foreigner to english it's omportant for me to understand what's been said - and I do :)
The part 2 of your ULF, seems a bit static, but I'm sure this will be all changed in the final film. I think it has to do with all the information given at a short time. If it's possible, maybe put some questions in, to make it more exciting?
I think you have a great plan for your ULF.

Geir Inge

Marj Atkins
August 12th, 2009, 04:20 PM
Filming the material required for this long form film has kept me pretty busy . What a mission! I must say, however, that filming this section was a lot of fun.

We had a good break at the coast last week which we deliberately planned around the low spring tide at full moon (Thursday). This did not leave me much time to do a great deal with the footage after getting back. I had the opportunity to film a variety of useful things from snow-covered mountains to sunny beaches; rock pools and seashore animals; pineapple plants and some bits and pieces at a gem of a game park we’ve never been to before. Uwol certainly pushes our boundaries and makes life pretty interesting in unexpected ways! I have met so many delightful, helpful people along the way.

I have not been able to give you a story to help you along this time unfortunately. I will drop the music and most of the beach and rock pool scenery which are just gap fillers for the music this round. Basically this section will cover the mathematics found in many of the seashore species and its purpose. The pentamerous, radially symmetrical design of the sea stars, cushion stars and brittle stars as well as the pentagonal mathematics found in the exquisite pansy shells - relatives of the sea urchins that also bear spines while alive. Many of these species can be found at the lowest levels of the sea shore in rock pools that are exposed at low springtide.

I am very grateful to my friend Debbie, a dental surgeon, for doing the X-ray of the little ram's horn shell (Spirula spirula) for me and to my neighbour Sherryl who very generously offered her comprehensive and beautiful shell collection for me to film. In this collection she amazingly had two Nautilus shells, one with it the exterior surface polished off to reveal the beautiful pearly surface below. The Nautilus shell displays self-similarity in the structure of its flotation chambers that are arranged in a logorhythmic spiral - all of which will be explained in detail in my final story. The Nautilus lives inside the shell which is approximately 20cm across while the little 2cm ram’s horn shell is the internal skeleton of the Spirula - a squid-like creature that lives 1000M below sea level and is therefore rarely seen. Their shells, however, are found scattered along our beaches in great numbers.

I may also include the Paper Nautilus. (Not shown in this submission) I found a number of these large, delicate shells washed up on the beach after a storm many years ago. The paper Nautilus shell is in fact the egg case made by the female octopus that guards the entrance. Who would have thought then they would come in useful for something like this!!!

The cone shells are examples of natural cellular automata.

My video has been uploaded to the Uwol Challenge site and should be up on Vimeo sometime tomorrow. Look forward to viewing your films. I was short of bandwidth last round with Uwol 13 going at the same time so I apologise for not commenting on some of your films - hope to sort that out this time round.