View Full Version : my first short..


Ryan McCrary
August 8th, 2003, 03:21 PM
this is my first short..

shot on gl2 (with a borrowed xl for the horse shot)
edited on my hp laptop with adobe premiere 6

its for my state arts commission.. rules: under 3 minutes, had to include a toaster somewhere ..

http://www.halfdomehosting.com/ryan/shooter.html

i know its nothing great.. i'm still learning.. let me know what you think..

*runs and hides*

-r

Rob Lohman
August 11th, 2003, 12:59 PM
I liked it. It was a fun idea and I liked a lot of shot composition
and editing. I think it could have used a desatuared almost B&W
(perhaps shifting it to brown/yellow a bit) look.

If I'm not mistaken you used copyrighted music. That's a dangerous
thing....

Ryan McCrary
August 11th, 2003, 02:17 PM
i tried different looks, and the desaturation looked almost too bland..

yea i do need to change the music..

Dylan Couper
August 11th, 2003, 06:32 PM
Well, what can I say...
I had my money on the toaster...

Still, quite entertaining for a short. Nice stuff.

Rob Lohman
August 12th, 2003, 01:47 AM
Same here, Dylan. I had my money on the toaster too..... Guess
we lost then eh

Josh Bass
August 12th, 2003, 02:04 AM
Awesome! Wish I'd thought of it. The shot of the toast popping out got me. I hate you for the location (not for using it in the movie, though). I've been searching for an area that looks like that. . .apparently there aren't any near or in Houston. So I'm one jealous monkey.

Ryan McCrary
August 12th, 2003, 07:31 AM
heh.. yea i'm out in the middle of nowhere.. theres plenty of area like this..

(and there's plenty of sweet tea)

good ol south carolina..

David Crusoe
August 13th, 2003, 05:20 PM
Very neat! A comment: some of your shots would be more effective with a tripod. While it's a pain in the neck to lug a big 'ol pod around, if you can use it for the majority of your still shots, your audience will be better focused on the subject of the shot rather than any new content/matter introduced by a roving camera lens. Great original work, and very nifty cutting!

Aaron Koolen
August 13th, 2003, 05:49 PM
Good stuff Ryan. Maybe it's just me but I felt sorry for the toaster by the end of it - so something worked!

I loved the toast popping too.


Cheers
Aaron

Ryan McCrary
August 13th, 2003, 05:51 PM
thanks everybody..

as for the tripod.. i got use of the first location and the actor together on very short notice.. (he actually shipped off to the merchant marines academy the day after i filmed most of it)..

all i had was a monopod at the time, and it only worked so well for some shots..

-r

Aaron Koolen
August 13th, 2003, 07:22 PM
The important thing here I reckon, is that you went out and did it. Just gotta keep shooting and shooting and you'll get better each time.

Words I should follow myself ;)

Aaron

Ryan McCrary
August 13th, 2003, 07:31 PM
heh.. yea.. i'm just suprised it all came together and worked..

it's hard to get people to stick to their word and take you seriously about this when your my age..

thanks everyone..

-r